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  • rubix.cube.

    mumbled "Been a while but I had an idea."

    2 months agoReply
    I thought I'd trying a texting story. I hope you like it. If there's anything I can do to work on it or do better just tell me!
    "Text Me.""I'll meet you one day." "Sure." "I promise."
  • rubix.cube.

    mumbled "Okay... so it's been way too long"

    3 months agoReply
    Hey guys, so it's been quite a while since I've been on here and posted a story, but school's back (back at it again). Okay, just kidding. But seriously, it's been way too long, and I'm really sorry about that. To make up for it, I wrote a short story (like really short). But if you want to check it out, then here's the link. Sorry again!
    Once Upon A TimeOnce upon a time... "Bailey poses exquisitely, a single damp tear trailing down her porcelain face, yet an elegant smile painted upon thin rosy lips." ...
  • rubix.cube.

    mumbled "I'd love if you could do this!"

    5 months agoReply
    Hello, so I recently posted my newest short story "In Small Doses of Bliss". I'm very grateful for the amount of reads that I've received, though I always want to know how I can improve my writing. If you could give me any constructive criticism, story ideas, or just a thought, I'd love to hear it!
    Once Upon A TimeOnce upon a time... "Bailey poses exquisitely, a single damp tear trailing down her porcelain face, yet an elegant smile painted upon thin rosy lips." ...
  • rubix.cube.
    5 months agoReply
    I love the first chapter! I like how it's going at a steady pace and brings a great introduction to the rest of the plot. If you wouldn't mind, I'd like to recommend something. When describing the appearance in the beginning "With her ruddy brown hair, caramel skin and wide, innocent eyes..." I would give the reader one of those descriptions instead of all at once. I especially liked the "with her ruddy brown hair", I really enjoyed the words used. But this would give the reader time to come up with their own appearance for the character, and then later on in the story, you could give more details. Appearance gives away a lot of the personality. Nonetheless, this chapter was beautifully written and I look forward to reading more of it. You're an incredible writer and the description alone had me hooked!
    Our Dark Lies
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    Olyxe “Ash” Heregale is not to be messed with. She lives for violence, laughs in the face of danger. She’s driven by a rage so bright and fierce, it’s not wonder she does so many stupid things. Freeing...
    Ray Lidstone
    5 months ago
    Aww thank you! I always tend just to slap down all my descriptions at once and I’m definitely working on doling it out more gradually to better integrate it with the story!
  • rubix.cube.

    mumbled "Thank goodness! Here's another short story!"

    5 months agoReply
    Since school is almost here (sadly)... I decided that I'd try to finish my next story "In Small Doses of Bliss". I hope you guys like it, but this will probably be the last time I update for a while due to school. Thanks!
    Once Upon A TimeOnce upon a time... "Bailey poses exquisitely, a single damp tear trailing down her porcelain face, yet an elegant smile painted upon thin rosy lips." ...
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