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    7 years agoReply
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    The true funny thing is that they think they can stop me from copy pasting and making my own version of it with explosions and at least three Harlem Shakes. "Or dedicated. But they are all still SUPER cute." That's one of the problems I could just pick out, the grammar quick. That's a fragment. One fragment or so is fine but when you have two fragments, one after another like this, it becomes a problem. The full capital on anything can just be bettered by a very or any other positive. XOXO, Parker.
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    Brittany is the average Nando's worker... until she meets a special customer
    HGpanda
    7 years ago
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    Parker... you are so weird... Have fun with making a Harlem Shake with that...
    lauranium
    7 years ago
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    Everyone's a little weird, right?
  • Pin!Mod
    7 years agoReply
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    The story is good in all, I just have one problem with it. The whole thing up there with the large amount of tags. The point of tags is to make something easy to find, for instance if I want to look at the tags of "Puppies" I don't get 90 stories about why bananas are better than Hitler. I like how it seems real and my only other complaint is that you two say the same things quite a few times. Once or twice if it's a big event is fine but if you do it every other time it gets to be a pain. Good job never the less. A winner is you. Here's a reward
    . XOXO, Parker.
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    Lauren and Caroline are two sixteen year olds who are dedicated directioners. They go to London for the summer and buy One Direction tickets. ©
    lauranium
    7 years ago
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    The reason we say the same things every time is because it's in both of our point of views; we both wanted to write about the same events. As soon as we get Olivia to write a chapter, we won't have our chapters combined, and we won't be saying the same things. But thanks for the advice, and thanks for the reward!
    HGpanda
    7 years ago
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    Banana are better than Hitler... you should write about that. Then I can point out all your freaking fragment sentences! :P
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