FemaleUnited KingdomMember since 27 Jan 13Age 19Last online 2 hours ago

Fiction writer.
I mostly write crime/mystery themed stories with the occasional make believe aspect. I try (and hope) to make my characters interesting but believeable.
(I also love to make book covers.)
(And I seem to use too much parenthesis.)
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Finished Movellas include:
Claw Marks and Corridors (in it's very rough 1st draft stage)
Lie Like a Magpie (also a first draft, but minorly edited)
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My 'to be read' pile will always be huge and my bookshelves full. I believe you can never have too many books.

I am also currently doing a degree in Interior Design + Architecture but writing has always been one of my favourite things in the world. Since the age of about 11 I have wanted to publish a book.

My favourite books are any by Terri Terry (especially the Slated Trilogy and Mind Games) and of course Harry Potter! I may have read them over 10 times each...

I have kind of always sucked at writing bios so I hope this is satisfactory.

  • Lily Anna
    3 hours agoReply
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    Hey, I've read it all so far as promised. I'd just like to say I don't usually read fan-fictions but this isn't as fanfictioney as many others. The way you have written is almost poetic and slightly magical. You can really tell the strong affections from the characters and their internal thought process. I think a lot of people distract from emotions sometimes but you put in a good combination of description and feelings into it, which makes it seem a very thought provoking story so far. It flows pretty well.

    Just a few little CC points. In chapter 3, it switches to first person I think accidentally at one point. I also feel like your paragraphs are a bit too long in places so maybe you could cut some down slightly or split them in to smaller ones. I'd just watch out for too long sentences too as some of them are also a tad long, but nothing too major.

    Another peice of advice I have is that although you have some wonderful description, it's hard to tell the ages of the characters. At first I thought Lisa was a very young girl, which then didn't make sense that Harry would be in love with her (like too young child and older guy seems a bit creepy if you know what I mean). So, I think some indication on both of their ages would be a good idea and help to add to their character descriptions.

    Other than that, great writing! :) As far as advice goes for trying to continue the story and get through writers block, the best way is to think where you want the story to end. What actions need to happen to lead up to that. Are Harry and Lisa going to meet again? Will they be able to be with each other? Are there going to be more issues in the way? Is Lisa going to get ill again? If you answer those questions to yourself, you'll be able to work out what you want to write and include chapters towards the actions and outcomes you want.

    Good luck with writing!
    Complications
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    Love isn't simple. Harry and Lisa proved that. Will they manage to overcome the many complications? Thank you @Zireee for the amazing cover and banners!!!
    Rain Evangeline
    3 hours ago
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    Thank you so much! I don't really want it to be to in your face fanfictional if that is possible to I'm glad you thought that!

    I will make sure to change those issues! I appreciate CC, and I find it frustrating when people don't accept it!

    I imagining Harry as his proper age and Lisa maybe two or so years younger, but will again make that known!

    Thank you for your advice! I know how I want it to end, I'm just not sure how!

    x
  • Lily Anna
    2 days agoReply
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    A nice wrap-up to the story ending. :) Well done for writing to the end! It can be hard at times but you powered through and you should be proud of yourself for that. It can take time to write complete stories, I struggle with it all the time, so it's great that you managed it.
    Don't Stop
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    Sherryn and Toby were troublemakers. Always have been. - - - They've been best friends since the third grade. - - - Sherryn's mom is always working at the hospital, so she's never around to see what...
    Zireee
    2 days ago
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    omg, I should've given you credit because you helped with it. I don't think I would've gotten any further with it without asking you for help so thank you, thank you, thank you so much!
    Lily Anna
    2 days ago
    Aw, it's no problem. Honestly. You're the one who actually wrote it :)
  • Lily Anna

    mumbled "Thank you"

    1 weeks agoReply
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    I know I haven't been very active on the site lately but I do check up on things.
    Thank you for the 2000+ reads!
    Lie Like a MagpieMaggie has dyed hair but faking her hair colour isn't the only thing. Her name, her identity, what her parents do for a living; they're all faked too....

    It was so amazing to see it creep slowly up in view numbers. Makes me very happy. :)

    In a form of other updates, I'm extremely busy right now with uni work, it's so stressful, time consuming and a little overwhelming! I haven't written a single fictional thing for ages and I miss it, but I really hope I can get some writing done soon or at least do some editing or write a blog post (I'm not keeping up to date with that either... ahhh)
    Squonk of the Nightshade
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    Take your time. No point in rushing perfection ;)
  • Lily Anna
    2 weeks agoReply
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    I can definitely relate to this!

    Well written and emotive. :)
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    We are all flawed. Some ignore, some don't. Some accept it, some don't. Some take their time, go through misery and pain before finally accepting there's no way to true perfection. This is a poetic piece...
    SnowPotato_
    2 weeks ago
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    Thank you <3 <3

    ~Snow
  • Lily Anna
    2 weeks agoReply
    This is really sad but some great poetry. I love your use of language to build the comparison to how the father was before, moving on to how he became. I think it fits well with how you have split it into three sections.

    Good luck in the competition! :)
    O Father
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    A three part poem about a father and child, for the 'Sweetest kind of Poison' Poetry competition. Hope you enjoy!
    Piers Hale
    1 weeks ago
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    Wow, thanks for the kind words Lily! I can only hope for the competition :)
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