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Hi. ^.^ I'm very excited to be a part of movellas! I love writing! I love reading! I have a strong passion for the arts! And an equally strong passion for sports! I love anime and reading fanfictions. It would mean a lot to me if you would read my stories and give me feed back, constructive critisism, and positive comments! Thank you!

It was Gods plan and who am I to try and change it. There are reasons we meet people. Some make us stronger. Some hurt us and leave. Others stay with us in spirit. Some pretend. Some people need us for the simple reason because of who we are. Some love us and will never leave. Others are a lesson to help us meet someone better. Others are a candle in the dark. Some are rocks in a storm. People come and go but they also come and stay. Who am I to try and stop this or even understand why. All I know is that for the moment let's enjoy it while it lasts. Stop saying what if and start saying why not. There is only one now and it won't happen again. So let's have fun.

  • Toria_Zitro21
    Its pretty good. I like the character a lot and your spelling is wonderful. Finally someone who can spell. I like your storyline and how real you make her seem. I love the suspense as well and I really hope you continue writing more. Would you take a look at my story Ivory Keys and tell me what you think about it and if there is anything I could improve on? I would love it if you did that and it would mean a lot to me. Thanks :D
    Good luck in the competition!
    Sight
    Sight
    1985
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    Young Laura Croiden, always thought her life was boring, and nothing fun or interesting ever happened. Then one day Laura receives two tickets, and two backstage passes from a relative for her and a friend...
    EuphoniumGal
    6 years ago
    Yeah I'll have a read at it, and thanks for the comment :)
  • Toria_Zitro21
    I like it a lot! I loved how you described everything. I think you should slow it down just a little bit.Maybe on the way to meet her parents witches start to appear. Check some of your spelling and please please update soon! I really liked this story and I am getting the vibe that they aren't just best friends! I was sad to see that this was only 3 chapters and kept clicking my mouse waiting for more! Love it.
    Hansel and Gretel
    Hansel and Gretel
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    Gretel was six when her life changed, she met Hansel and she met her first witch. Since that day, Hansel and Gretel have been best friends, but everything is about to change. (By the way, yes things...
    Lessa
    6 years ago
    Thanks, and yeah, my autocorrect on my computer is having trouble picking up some mistakes. I will certainly slow it down. :)
    Toria_Zitro21
    6 years ago
    I can't wait to read more!
  • Toria_Zitro21
    That was cheesy! but I loved it!!!! Uber cheesy hahaha it was adorable! Please make a sequel!! I would love to see them get married and have lil babies!!! great job!
    Neville's Confession (One shot)
    Neville's Confessi...
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    The battle of Hogwarts is currently going on. Without knowing whether he or the girl he's been in love with since he first laid eyes on her, will make it out alive. Neville Longbottom, decides it's about...
  • Toria_Zitro21
    It's a very good start. I think you should separate your paragraphs a little more because right now it's a little hard to read. Also maybe changing your font to Arial or times new roman would help your readers. The plot line is good but add a little more detail. What happened to make her cut herself? Does she feel any pain as the knife cuts her or does she feel happy, free in a way? When you are describing this guy she seems very fickle about the way he looks. This makes her seem trashy. She already has a boyfriend why does she notice that guy this way? Also talk about her home life more. background on her would be helpful. one more thing does her brother have some sort of importance to her? or does she get used a lot because of who her brother is?

    I love the story so far maybe with a little tweaks here and there it will be amazing. Liked it, I'm a fan, and favorite! If you don't mind would you take a look at my story Ivory Keys? It would mean a lot to me if you would give me some feedback. Be as harsh as you want. I can take! Thanks!
    Which way is the right way
    Which way is the...
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    If you had the chance to change your life, would you? Of course, what am I asking? Everyone would. But I wouldn't. I had the perfect life. I had a lovely house, parents who earned loads of money, looked...
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