Zireee's Story Review (RE-OPENED)


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11. Rediscovered Love by Queen.Ali Styles

My Opinion:

First thing's first: I love your cover! It's so eye-catching.

Now, back to the story.
I had a hard time trying to figure out who was who and who was talking to who. The reason why was because you kept flipping from 
first person to third person. You should stick with one of them because it gets confusing.

You don't have any spelling, capitalization, or punctuation errors. 

Sometimes you also flip from present tense to past tense. It makes it hard to know for a reader if this is happening right now or if it already happened. Try to stick with one of those as well.

Other than I think the story is really good and you should continue with it. I hope the tips I gave you helped!

Rating: ⭐️⭐️⭐️


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