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If I had to live by the words I wrote I would either be a mermaid, an Alien Princess, a superpowered heroine or a desperate detective.

Second Drafts

por , sábado febrero 23, 2019
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Second Drafts

I recently finished the second draft for Day 723 and thought I'd share my process with you all.


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  • Katie Pharoah
    This is brilliant!
    The Complexities of Muggle Machinery
    The Complexities...
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    Harry bought a refrigerator. Then it was a microwave. Then a blender. Thursday was the coffee brewer. Ron really liked that last one.
    Blue Rose
    1 days ago
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    Thank tou you! I'm happy you thought so. I had a fun time writing it. :)
    Blue Rose
    1 days ago
    *Thank you!
  • Katie Pharoah
    A good start, this comes across more fantasy than realism but I'm loving the characters so far. There are a few grammatical issues where 'it's' or some other phrasing is missing but that can be cured with some editing. Pigeon is also misspelt in the first chapter title. Good luck in the competition :)
    Displacia
    Displacia
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    Onetime love was just a fortune, until something just wasn't, in a mind of displaced, grey misfortune, two teens discover the way love works is, by natural expectations, unfortunately there love is misplaced...
  • Katie Pharoah
    Works excellently as a one-shot, I love the formatting of the bolding of some of the words and you have some wonderful phrases there. CC: consider, breaking up into separate paragraphs to make it easier to read :)
    her (recreated for the toxic love competition)
    her (recreated for...
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    a one shot about a boy who lost all that he had especially the only thing he ever wanted. her. (recreated for the toxic love competition)
  • Katie Pharoah
    Such an interesting premise, a brilliant start :)
    Parallel Self
    Parallel Self
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    When Sophia was a child, she had an imaginary friend who looked identical to her. As an adult, Sophia begins to see her 'imaginary friend' again, only it turns out that it is not an imaginary friend, but...
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