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I am thirteen years old but what do you care.

Hella rad

My friends are nerds and we're all weird as heck, we also nicknamed one satan.

Dont touch me I'll give you a case of homestuck.

Dont touch me u have germmmsss

  • Mageofspacee
    Hrrrmmmmm. Okay. You have some word mistakes here, and I feel like things climax too fast in each chapter. Work on small things, like, the way they look, how they act, their quirks, flaws, talents. If a character is suffering, make it sound like they are. And no doubt, I loove the way you have written this. But I think it could also improve a great deal. Nice idea.
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    My twin and I have ran away. I must protect her with my life. My farther is drunken fool. He sexually touches us. He beats us. She's all I have...
    '~' what?
    vor 6 Jahren
    Yea, but I figured that if I didn't describe what they looked like it would be more creative for the reader
    Mageofspacee
    vor 6 Jahren
    yes, but at least give us a vague idea... what's their hair colour? eye colour? Are they light or dark skinned??? Like, INTROODDUUCVCCEE YOOO CHAAARRAACTTTERRRS WOOOMMMAANN *jk*
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