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Hello Internet! Read a little, write a little, let me know what you think :) Criticism and advice are much appreciated.

  • yourstruly
    4 years agoReply
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    So, I'm just beginning this story, and I'm only a few chapters in, but I must say I absolutely love your writing style. Your main character is absolutely hilarious and completely relatable. Your grammar and punctuation is great, words aren't clipped in shorthand, and I just love it. I love love love it. I had been searching for a story about this, anyway, and gave up on it a while back ago, but just stumbled onto this gem and my heart melted. Quest accomplished! Thank you for this piece, and I hope it, one day, gets published. It is definitely publishable material. Best wishes!
    Confessions of a High School Supermodel
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    Meet Maddie Fox, a self-proclaimed Lozerilla. She’s 16, loves One Direction, shops at Forever 21, and frequently spends high school lunchtime hiding inside a bathroom stall. Maddie dreams of fitting...
    Shanna
    4 years ago
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    What an incredible comment to get! This seriously made my day! You should see me right now, I'm like showing your comment to all my friends! I feel so proud that all my amazing readers like my little story! It means a lot to hear you say you hope it gets published because that's my dream for it! I'm just curious- you said you'd been searching for "a story about this." What kind of story had you been looking for? Feedback is always really appreciated! Anyway, I hope you love the rest of the book as much as the beginning! :)
    yourstruly
    4 years ago
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    I was searching for a "teenage success modeling story." I really have no idea why, haha. I think I saw a MTV True Life episode in it and thought it was interesting... Glad this made your day!
  • yourstruly
    5 years agoReply
    I find this piece to be enjoyable--this is an interesting concept of being deceived by common cold symptoms. Nicely done, keep it up!
    A Zombie Chronicle
    A Zombie Chronicle
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    With the mother of all colds coming on, Daniel commutes into London at the beginning of the New Year. All is not what it seems as everyone around him appears to be suffering with what he first believes...
    inedxr
    5 years ago
    thanks very much, Yourstruly - I appreciate that. It is very difficult in a well-addressed genre to find something a bit diffrent, but I am trying. Hope you enjoy the rest.
  • yourstruly
    5 years agoReply
    I'm kind of really in love with this. Just saying. All the good stories refuse to gain likes and comments--a real shame, because this one is a beauty. Plot-wise, it's good. You can feel the character's anger and slight cynicism throughout. Post a new chapter soon.
    In lieu of pain
    In lieu of pain
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    There are lots of ways to to deal with pain. Some people scream, some people cry, some people get angry and fight and argue, some people play relentless pong or gently tickle the piano until the feeling...
    Poppiesaur
    4 years ago
    Thank you so much! You're really lovely, I appreciate this so much :')
  • yourstruly
    5 years agoReply
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    HiI I'm curious to see where this goes. Just make sure you are using proper punctuation and capitalization, but other than that, keep writing!
    give me love (harry styles fanfiction)
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    Ryder was good friends with harry styles before the x-factor after he became famous they never stayed friends one day Ryder bumps into him at starbucks what will happen next? read this to find out
  • yourstruly
    5 years agoReply
    Was definitely not expecting that twist, and I hadn't read one with that particular twist yet, so points on originality!
    Just The Begining
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    (This is for the Shot for 1D challenge.)
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