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  • writemeastory
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    I love the plotline of the story. It's exiting and makes you want to keep reading-you should write more! The only thing you could improve on is keeping it in one tense eg. was instead of is and couldn't rather than can't. Otherwise this is a really great story! :)
    Say My Last Farewell
    Say My Last Farewe...
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    This is about a Filipina teenager who fell in love with the most unexpected person in the most unexpected time. Does that mean a bad ending or a good one? In the process, readers will encounter Filipino...
    VemJ
    4 years ago
    Thank you so much sweetie! I'll sure do check that out :D
  • writemeastory
    Please let me know how I can improve the story :) thanks x
    Blue Light
    Blue Light
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    When a stranger staggers towards you door, hurt, bleeding and carrying a package what would you do? A young boy takes the package, and although warned not to open it, he cannot help himself...
  • writemeastory
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    I like the start of your story! The setting is very unusual :) Maybe you could build more of a backstory to Jamie because we don't know that much about him at the moment since it is in Diary Form. Keep Writing-So far so good :) x
    Innocent Prisoner
    Innocent Prisoner
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    Jamie Bothwick is a fifteen year old boy accused of killing his ex girlfriend. Even his family don't believe he is innocent.
    Purple Pen
    4 years ago
    Thank you for the advise I really appreciate it and when I write more on this story I will defiantly take your advise and use it xx
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