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My name is Kayla. I like creative writing, but I don't like to post my stuff online soo...I'll just use this to read people's stuff. Belieber now and forever <3

  • *~*~UnderTheRainbow~*~*
    this is pretty good...but some of your dialogue and sentences are a bit awkward and confusing
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    Joe is a teenage boy ......... “Well, young man, you’re on notice, and I really mean it this time.” At the door she stopped and wagged her finger at me, “Find an outside activity or else!” Then she left.
    geoffrey stuart
    6 years ago
    Thank you. People portray boys as only grunting a replay using simple words yet when alone together with their friends they can talk full sentences, and some can actually read.
    HanEps
    6 years ago
    i like it! i thought it was funny, a little cringy in places but that worked! it may be stereotyping boys a little, but joe is a pretty accurate portrayal of most of the boys i know!
    i would say, that out of the characters, its Gill i didnt quite believe, but since shes not the main focus of the story i guess it doesnt matter so much, but you might want work on her characterisation a little :D
    geoffrey stuart
    6 years ago
    Thanks for your comments pleased you thought it funny
    As to stereotyping boys, I was hoping they would identify some aspect of themselves in a broader sense and cringy bits that’s boys for you.
    You say the mother not so believable, She’s there to give the adult concepts Credence.
  • *~*~UnderTheRainbow~*~*
    I don't understand this, but i love one direction!
    More Than This - One Direction
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    Natalie vælger at flytte hjem til sin far, der bor i London. Hun forlader derfor alt hvad hun har i Danmark i håb om at få et bedre liv der hvor hun kommer hen nu. Hun håber at alt vil blive normalt igen,...
  • *~*~UnderTheRainbow~*~*
    I liked how you made it dramatic, good job! your such a good writer
    A Shattered Mirror
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    This is my entry for the Movellas "Secrets" competition! :) -Everyone has secrets. Everyone has memories. Everyone has a past. Often times, all three come back to haunt us. Seventeen-year-old Tallulah...
    SinfullyRiddling
    6 years ago
    aww you think so? thanks that means so much <3
  • *~*~UnderTheRainbow~*~*
    WHENS CHAPTER TWOOO lol. i love the plotline you came up with, cant wait to read more from you, missy! =D
    Cat's Eye
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    There has always been something different and unusual about Miranda Wilkson. Her mother went missing when she was young and her father became a drunk. She doesn't have many friends, and prefers sweatshirts...
    SinfullyRiddling
    6 years ago
    I'm sorry, I don't have an exact date for chapter two yet D: but lets just say its coming soon(: thanks so much for your nice feedback, I really appreciate it! <3
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