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~Shortlister for the Sony Young Movellist 2013~
-Currently doing work experience at Movellas.
-Aspiring writer.
-Avid reader of fiction & literature.
-Member of many fandoms.
-Favorite (Book) Quote: "She didn't look pretty. She looked like art. And art was supposed to make you feel something." - Eleanor & Park, Rainbow Rowell.

  • UltimateEden
    Hey, this is really good! You should write more of this! I wanna know what happens next! :) Your main character is really interesting . . . she seems really tolerant and not bitter at all - i like her already. Can't wait for what comes next!
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    Blinded. Is what I am. After a accident which killed my mother, I have been completely blind. I was only ten. It was a hard and drastic change but I learnt to cope. With the help of my father, Martha the...
  • UltimateEden
    Dude, this is awesome!! Parts of this are very reminiscent of John Green. This was a really moving story, partly because I think you're right and also because the main character was written so well! They really felt human - not just because they were really funny, and super thoughtful in parts, but also because they were flawed and openly admitted it. You also did a really good job of showing their flaws before they admitted - you 'showed' as opposed to 'told.' This is a really great skill to have (especially in writing) and i struggle with it a lot. This is great! Keep up the good work! :D
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    Rated yellow for a bit of swearing. Like, maybe two or three mild words. I don't know if I'm being over-zealous, let me know if the rating is incorrect. So this was a thing. A very morbid thing. I don't...
  • UltimateEden
    Hey, this is cool! It should totally have more views! I really like the pace and rhythm - I'm not even that into poetry, but I really liked this! I think you could definitely re-write this or maybe write more poems as there's still so much I want to know and learn about The race of Perinacea! I'd love to read more from you! :) x
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    This is a poem for the Hidden Powers fantasy competition. I would like you to read it. I hope it's liked.
    missme Emily
    3 years ago
    Thank you
    UltimateEden
    3 years ago
    S'all cool :) You're welcome! x
  • UltimateEden
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    This is really good - a funny, brash and plucky narrator, great characters (I dislike John already) and a believable plot. I really like it! There are a few spelling mistakes here and there, but it doesn't affect the quality of your writing (nor the depth of your story!). Please keep writing - I'll keep reading! :D x
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    Hey Journal, I think that, since you and I have to stick this out, I think that John is an idiot. and also, I think that maybe we can get along.
    Sushi Swimmer
    3 years ago
    Thank you! A few times I've purposely made a few grammatical mistakes, just to put it into view of a fourteen year old girl that's just writing in a journal.
    UltimateEden
    3 years ago
    That's such a cool idea! (and very meta). Very intelligent too, as clearly I missed it xD Keep up the good work :)
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