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  • Tuesday M
    5 years agoReply
    Really good I love how you repeat fixed to be broken. I think it is fantastic. Could you please have a look at Bring Her Back To Me by olliegeorge and like it if you like it because if he get's enough likes he will put a video of him singing it on it.
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    A simple poem telling the tragic tale of a girl, whose heart has been broken one too many times... (My entry for that poetry contest. Poetry isn't my strong point so I am open to all advise and constrictive...
  • Tuesday M
    5 years agoReply
    it's great and it works really well as a poem. You should put a video of you singing it on it.
    Bring Her Back To Me
    Bring Her Back To...
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    Yet again more song Lyrics. Not sure if it works as a poem. So please like/comment accordingly
    Tuesday M
    5 years ago
    Sorry I can't go along with the sort of competition we had but I could make a sort of backing track to So Much More to make up for it. It would be instrumental as my singing is limited to karaoke on cruise ships but I can and have play the clarinet in front of rather large audiences (in a band not on my own as I'm not that good). It might not be possible though as I'm not sure of my computer's ability to pick up sound.
    WriterMan
    5 years ago
    ahh thats alright. probably best to call the whole thing off, but I'd love to see your music video so put it up anyway!
    Tuesday M
    5 years ago
    OK it might be a week or two though
  • Tuesday M
    5 years agoReply
    Is it a haiku? I can't remember exactly how many syllables they're meant to have on each line so I can't tell.
    Autumn Weather
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    Yet another poem. Like/comment. thanks again
    WriterMan
    5 years ago
    Haha yes! you got it! ;)
  • Tuesday M
    5 years agoReply
    It's really good. I like it. Just one thing though is that some of the lines are very long so it doesn't flow as well as it could do. If it were (was?) mine I would probably split the fifth line into two maybe even three separate lines.
    The way he looks at me
    The way he looks...
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    Blurb - I just recently wrote this poem , and I would love sone feedback on it to help me improve it so if you can help then thanks.
    Theunexpectedgirl
    Ok thank you , I totally get what you mean so ill edit it straight away x
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