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I like to read stories and give feedback. No hate please. Xx

  • tommolad
    1 years agoReply
    PLEASE UPDATE!!!!!!
    Slave Auction 2: The Boys' Story
    Slave Auction 2:...
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    While Jenna is helping Liam pack for college, she comes across an old photo of Niall, Zayn, Harry, Louis, and Liam in the slave auction when they were freshman. Determined to find out the truth about why...
  • tommolad
    1 years agoReply
    There is a lot of run on sentences & P.S. it's special. But I really love it! Probably do need to capitalize better, I mean I'm not very smart myself. But, I'm just trying to help!! It's great! :))
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    Melia is a 17 years old girl who lives in London With her mom and dad, her best friends is Laura and Ashton, she goes to high school and everything is normal, until she meets Harry Styles...
    Anja Lorenzen
    1 years ago
    thanks :-)
     Dani - B.C.D
    1 years ago
    I agree with Narcy
  • tommolad
    1 years agoReply
    love it �� keep writing it don't end it too early!! but when they're talking can you put "whatever they're saying" so that I'll know they're talking and it's not just what they're thinking. thank you :)) it's really good!!
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    Melia is a 17 years old girl who lives in London With her mom and dad, her best friends is Laura and Ashton, she goes to high school and everything is normal, until she meets Harry Styles...
    Anja Lorenzen
    1 years ago
    Thanks for you're good criticism , i will keep writing ;-)
    Anja Lorenzen
    1 years ago
    Hey @[tommolad] have you read the other chapters, if you have, what do you think about it? :-)
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