FemaleUnited KingdomMember since 17 Apr 13Age 18Last online 3 months ago

Hi, I would love it if you could read mine and comment what you think. I basically write whatever I feel like but my main genre is probably sci-fi or something like that. I don't know what to put here so it's probably really boring but I promise
my movellas are better :).
In my spare time I play guitar and write my own music. I'm performing arts mad! :D I'm also into art and lots of different sports.

  • getmeausernamethatworks
    It sounds like a good plot but you need to slow down and use more punctuation and paragraphs, the style your writing in now it is as if you are writing a fight scene. Every so often you go into a bit of detail and when you do that I can really see the book come to life, please use more detail! Also you need to watch your spelling sometimes. I would have liked this part of the book to be spread out over a much longer period, possibly even ten pages of a regular sized book and then I could really get the feel of it. I haven't published anything in ages because I'm forcing myself to slow down so that I put more detail in and write more in each chapter and I think that what you need to do, hope this helps.
    The year of the dragon book one
    The year of the...
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    Ren lives with her aunt and uncle. They have always said the her father died in a accident but she dosen't believe that. Then she gets a note on her birthday to meet a mysterious girl named Selene and...
  • getmeausernamethatworks
    I really love the story so far but there are a few spelling mistakes and in some places a sort of repetition I think. It's probably just a case of trying to use different words but I'm not too sure. Overall a great story :)
    Curse
    Curse
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    After finally putting her life together, can she loose it all. Due to one man and his wolf...
  • getmeausernamethatworks
    Your ideas are just so amazing and original, and your writing style is so amazing that no matter how long you have written about a character I have a clear picture of them. I never know what to write here but basically you're amazing!!!
    Nowhere To Run
    Nowhere To Run
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    Rusty has felt like he's been pushed and pulled this way and that all his seventeen years. And for him, he doesn't like that every corner you turn you're surrounded by technology this and technology that....
    Timeywimeytotoro
    4 years ago
    Aw thankyou SO much. This made my day! :)
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