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13 years old and I have always enjoyed writing

  • starlit.skies
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    this is amazing, I feel like you truly tried hard on this and it really shows! your vocabulary choices are amazing and very sophisticated, you really know how to describe a scene in such an alternative way that it makes it almost instantly interesting. you really can write such beautiful sentences and this short story is wrote very well! :))
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    [ANY FEEDBACK OR CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM WOULD BE SO HELPFUL LIKE SERIOUSLY THIS WOULD BE SO USEFUL AND I WOULD LOVE YOU FOREVER]
    starlit.skies
    1 years ago
    it's no problem, it is a fabulous story which you have strung together very well! No need for thanks, I admire your work dearly, maybe you could check out some of my work and give me some constructive feedback? I would really appreciate :) x
    Rhapsody
    1 years ago
    Yeah, I'd love to!
    I might not be able to get it done within the very next few days (because, you know, Christmas as all that jazz) but I'll get to it as soon as I can! :) xx
    starlit.skies
    1 years ago
    that's fine, thank you so much though! :) xx
  • starlit.skies
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    I really enjoy this story and I like how it changes perspective throughout, how it is told from all three points of view and not just one of the girls' point of view! I do not have any negatives I do not think and the story flows really well! I hope it is updated soon. I also like how the chapters are not too long and not too short, I would be very grateful if you checked out some of my movellas sometime? Thank you :)
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    Faultless. Flawless. Falling. ♛ Meg. Cara. Rosalie. The fool, the brat, and the addict. They’re perfect, and everyone in Elm Academy knows it. Unfortunately, even perfection has its price.
    Gabriel
    2 years ago
    Thank you :)
    Mahogany
    2 years ago
    Thank you so much! XD
    starlit.skies
    2 years ago
    Thank you and you're all very welcome! You are all very talented!
  • starlit.skies
    Wow! This is amazing!
    The Fault in Our Stars - An Alternative Ending
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    The Fault in Our Stars was the John Green best selling book that had readers everything crying like a blubbering baby at 2 o'clock in the morning over a fictitious character called Augustus Waters. The...
    S R Bowes
    2 years ago
    Awh thank you. I just need to work on the narrative, it's not hazely enough and I guess add more detail about the death rather than it's aftermath and/ build up
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