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I am a teenager. Surprise! I know absolutely nothing about 1D so don't expect any stories on them. Or at least I don't expect to. But life is full of surprises, right?

<My sister, さくら❀, got me interested in this site.>

I enjoy writing very much, and would greatly appreciate any and all feedback. Comments mean more to me than favoring my work. Mistakes make the world go round, so please let me know if I've made some in my writing.

Now, if you do like something, be sure to let me know. I appreciate all likes and favors! If you fan me, I am likely to return the favor. :)

Personally, I feel that we are a biased audience when judging ourselves. With this in mind, I'd like to let you know that I am obnoxiously sarcastic at times, tend to rant when I feel strongly about something, am an extreme nerd, and an awesome person to be around!

So enjoy! :D

  • Sophia Marie
    5 months agoReply
    When do we find out who has won?
    Lavern2002
    5 months ago
    They have to read all the entries, so it usually takes some time. I'd say it usually takes around a month - sometimes more, sometimes less. :-) If you entered, I wish you luck! <3
  • Sophia Marie
    7 months agoReply
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    After reading the first story, some minor pointers:
    You use the word "obscure" twice in the same paragraph. Try changing one of them to a different verb? Also, in the second paragraph, there's a wrong use of "to" which should be "too". (It's the first "to").
    Overall, I love the imagery in the story and the transition from serene to chaotic. The short story also has a lot of room for embellishment, if you so choose. When you're describing the scenery of the valley, you can really go into sensory details. It's kind of fun to go overboard with description. What does the valley look like? Can you maybe see the sunrise? What does the stream sound like? What does it smell like?
    (You do this really well describing the fire. It has a creepy (in a good way!) effect!). For 12 years old, this is an amazing place to start and to build up on. Keep up the good work!
    My Sister's Short Stories - A Compilation
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    My 12 year old sister has spent a lot of time writing stories, some short ones, and some not-so-short-but-not-exactly-long ones. She asked me to upload them on my account to get people's opinions. They...
    proud2Bme
    7 months ago
    Wow, thank you! My sister is very happy with your comment. Constructive criticism is what she wanted, and you have said it perfectly! We are both pleased that you enjoyed reading it, and my sister in particular is very happy with your last comment, which made her realise that she has some potential in writing - something she is passionate about, but no so confident in herself for. Thank you for reading, Sophia Marie!
    Sophia Marie
    7 months ago
    1 Like
    I see myself in her style of writing, so I am definitely happy to help! :)
    proud2Bme
    7 months ago
    Oh, that's good! :D
  • Sophia Marie
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    I like the messages in each of your poems. Though I may not generally relate to them, the messages are strong. I like the rhyme scheme in "Wishing"! :D
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    A compilation of my poetry ranging across the board. [I'm not depressed, by the way] So far, these are all published as separate movellas, so you can either comment here on the whole, or if you want...
    Prodigy
    1 years ago
    Thank you, much appreciated :)
  • Sophia Marie
    This made me genuinely grin while I read it! This is awesome! I love it!
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    Poem about how people change their views throughout life. Again, I'm HORRIBLE with these blurbs, sorry. [This is also included in my "Leaves of Lines" compilation]
    Sophia Marie
    1 years ago
    If it wouldn't be too much to ask, could you maybe take a look at my story "Purgatory"? It's a work in progress so I would really appreciate any feedback.
    Prodigy
    1 years ago
    Of course :) I don't have time at the moment, but I'll try to do it tomorrow. Feel free to bug me until I do ;)
    Sophia Marie
    1 years ago
    It's fine. :) Whenever you get around to it, you get around to it.
  • Sophia Marie
    This is awesome! I really love the texture and folding you did with the fabric in her hand! I'm working on that myself, since it is a really difficult skill for me to learn. Well done!
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    My entry for the Divergent contest :D For my cover i chose to illustrate the scene where Tris discards her Abnegation robes, about to jump from the roof and join Dauntless. I realise that there are supposed...
    TheFuzz ϟ
    2 years ago
    Thank you very much :D I'm sure you'll get it soon, and once you do it's easy peasy :)
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