FemaleDenmarkMember since 10 Nov 11Last online 3 weeks ago

jeg er en pige på 15 og går i 8 klasse jeg elsker fantasy bøger og læser meget. jeg elsker anime

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  • siaka
    1 years agoReply
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    Oh and I forgot to tell you. I really love that cover!
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    C. A.
    1 years ago
    Thank you ;)
  • siaka
    1 years agoReply
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    This is actually quite good. You have a very good writing technique but I can still see some places were you would have to make some changes. Fx. in the first chapter in the first line: And therewith, I took a lamp in my hand..... I don't think you need therewith in that sentence. And then just a few lines down from there you write: I looked through the glass to find out who it was. I put the knife..... You can't write I that close to each other it doesn't sound very right. It doesn't flow.
    So I hope it helped you a little and keep going! This sounds very promising.
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    C. A.
    1 years ago
    I like your feedback. I'll fix those mistakes right away :)
    siaka
    1 years ago
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    I make the same mistakes sometimes too, but I've become better at not making the same mistakes twice. I always read my own writings out loud to myself and I often find mistakes that I didn't notice before.
  • siaka
    1 years agoReply
    Jeg har nogle ideer, men jeg får aldrig rigtigt skrevet noget. Min hjerne har ikke lyst til at samarbejde med mig xD. Jeg tror nu bare at det er fordi jeg har for meget at lave her for tiden, eller det virker det som om for mig. Jeg får ret sent fri fra skole og så skal jeg nå at lave lektier og resten af tiden SKAL jeg altså slappe af ifølge mig. så jeg får ikke skrevet særligt meget. Måske skulle jeg prøve at skrive videre med den jeg er igang med xD.
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