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  • GymnasticsGirl
    As promised, I shall leave a ... REVIEW! (Hi!)

    Chapter One

    Wow. Just ... Wow.


    This was a very interesting beginning! There are many things that were a tad confusing, but I'm sure such things will be addressed in later chapters. I'm very interested in learning more about Kear and what she is.

    As far as grammar goes, there were no errors, nor were there any typos.

    However, your sentences are jam-packed with adjectives, which, although it is fine just now, could potentially become run-on sentences.

    I love your narrator's personality!

    Overall, this is really good. If I saw it in a bookstore, I'd definitely buy it.
    We are the Damned
    We are the Damned
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    'We are the Damned, and we Damn you.' Meet Kear: Deadly, dangerous, and damned for all eternity to live in the Mantle, a Level of the world ablaze with fire and a spark of torture. Very few are ever...
    Le Fox
    3 years ago
    Thank you so much OMG!
  • GymnasticsGirl
    Love it!
    We are the Damned
    We are the Damned
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    25.7k
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    'We are the Damned, and we Damn you.' Meet Kear: Deadly, dangerous, and damned for all eternity to live in the Mantle, a Level of the world ablaze with fire and a spark of torture. Very few are ever...
    GymnasticsGirl
    3 years ago
    Purely because this is super popular, and I am incredibly narcissistic and a bit rude, I shall attempt to find fault with this spectacular price of work and review it. Forgive me if I come across as rude. I am determined.

  • GymnasticsGirl
    Amazing! I love it!
    *Little Fairy Times*
    *Little Fairy Time...
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    The lives of very familiar characters and roles with different backgrounds and adventures, all living in a small town called Faybridge.
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