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  • sappyhoran
    4 years agoReply
    this is good, very descriptive and realistic, the only thing i would say is be careful of internal dialogue, while it is a really good technique and adds lots of detail the character can sometimes over communicate, also some of the descriptions you have chosen dont quite fit the mood of the story, other than that it is really good.
    The Hidden Truth
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    Clara hasn't seen her sister for years, and she's not sure she wants to after all this time. Harper was so close to her, someone she knew like the back of her hand, but leaving the family for Uni changed...
    Alice♫
    4 years ago
    Okay thanks :)
  • sappyhoran
    4 years agoReply
    I'm so sorry, I really want to update by school is just getting in the way, I never have time to update anymore, I will do my best but its really hard
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    When Sapphire first sets eyes on her year 9 math teacher she is instantly attracted. She knows it’s wrong but you can’t help it, there is something in his eyes. Desire. Can she ignore him and concentrate...
  • sappyhoran
    4 years agoReply
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    This is really good epically for someone who I'm guessing English isn't a first language for
    In Every Dream Is A Bit Of Reality
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    A normal girl finds out that her parents are alaways fighting because of her, they Finally decided to TeLl her the true. She has another mum, her real mum is karen Payne. But what if all that was just...
    vale.stayne
    4 years ago
    Thanks and yeah Italian is my first language :) it means a lot to me thxxx <3 :}
  • sappyhoran
    4 years agoReply
    hi amazing readers i am doing my best to get up the next chapter but i am super busy with school but quick question how would you all feel about the plot over about the next 5 chapters maybe becoming M rated only for one chapter?
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    When Sapphire first sets eyes on her year 9 math teacher she is instantly attracted. She knows it’s wrong but you can’t help it, there is something in his eyes. Desire. Can she ignore him and concentrate...
  • sappyhoran
    4 years agoReply
    I'm so sorry its taking forever for the next chapter but I lost my laptop for about 4 days and I'm about to go back to school so I'm busy chapter 12 should be up by Saturday
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    When Sapphire first sets eyes on her year 9 math teacher she is instantly attracted. She knows it’s wrong but you can’t help it, there is something in his eyes. Desire. Can she ignore him and concentrate...
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