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I have one of the most eclectic set of hobbies I have ever come across.

I fix things
I bake cakes
I dance ballet
I model stuff
I mind kids
I play guitar
I box a bag
and of course
I read books
I write movellas

  • samsamhooray
    This is really good! The character is vivid, I really felt for her, wanted to help her. It covers the "mature" guideline of the competition! However, the reference to the happy endings, Romeo and Juliet is a tragedy, maybe not the best example? Its great writing! I hope this does well!
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    Originally for the 'On Dublin Street' competition.
    Eve Smallman
    5 years ago
    Ooh, fair point! Thank you :D
  • samsamhooray
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    I agree that the "teeny-weeny" sticks out! There is also some tense shifting, the last three lines, youu go from "I want" to "I made".
    This is deffinately my kind of story though, it seems fast paced, and I really like that you don't beat around the bush too much. Waiting on chapter 1!
    Liar, Liar
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    Ashling Rixon is a compulsive liar. Always has been, always will be. Well, as far as she can remember, anyway. You'd think this would be a problem when it comes to work and everyday life, right Not quite. Ashling...
  • samsamhooray
    Its pretty good! There isn't much of a story yet, but from the blurb I think it seems a good plot! The format is killer to read though, you should really left align it! Other than a few little grammar mistakes, you've got a good thing here.
    The practice Bucket List
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    Emily has to go to boarding school. In Wales. She, personally couldn't think if anything worse. However while she's there Emily meets Lucas, a boy who's paralysed from the waist down. Lucas will soon...
  • samsamhooray

    Read for a Read!

    Mine is a sci-fi/ adventure novel, but I'll read any genre, if you read mine first off.

    Robs
    5 years ago
    The practice Bucket ListEmily has to go to boarding school. In Wales. She, personally couldn't think if anything worse. However while she's there Emily meets Lucas, a boy who's...
    I'll read yours now and like it!
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