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A small fish. A cell phone novelist. A light novelist, too.

  • A Falling Rain Droplet
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    by ryby
  • ryby
    5 years agoReply
    so good for the opening. just a suggest that you should put dot after a sentence finish. looking forward to more :)

    ps: read my "a falling rain droplet" if you get a chance and leave feedback as well please. thx :)
    The Sad Girls story
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    Dette digt er om en lille pige, der blev slået af sine forældre og kun havde en ven
    Introvert
    5 years ago
    Thx :D I did make enters, but.... Just going to change that :)
  • ryby
    5 years agoReply
    A good opening. Just a suggest that you should put apostrophe ( ' ) for words that need it, such as: Im > I'm, youre > you're. or maybe you can write it in the full way it is like I am and you are. That's it. Looking forward to next chapter :)
    If You Could Read My Mind, You Would Be In Tears.
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    This is something I wrote this morning, when I woke up, I am sorry if there are some mistakes.
     Emily...
    5 years ago
    I will do that now, and thank you.! :)
     Emily...
    5 years ago
    Thanks, I like your nickname too. :)
  • ryby
    5 years agoReply
    I'm looking forward to next chapter. this is good so far. just a suggest maybe you should make a new line for every dialogue at chapter two. Writing it in just one paragraph like that makes it looks so crowded. That's all. Overall, it's good concept. You got my 'like' :)

    ps: read my "A falling rain droplet' if you get chance and leave feedback. thx :)
    Followed?
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    This shortstory follows a psychologist who meets a strange girl called Catherine Wood. Catherine feels there is something or someone following her, but of course the psychologist thinks she has a mental...
    Line Eriksen
    5 years ago
    Thank you very much! I'll fix it right now, it wasn't that crowded in my word document. (-: Thank you for making me aware of the problem ;)
  • ryby
    5 years agoReply
    This is really interesting. It can hook me especially at chapter two. Looking forward to more! :D
    Roses Are Red
    Roses Are Red
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    Summer is an English girl living in London. She has a secret kept from us. It could kill her and her friends.
  • ryby
    5 years agoReply
    it has good opening. well, i'm looking forward to next chapter though, since for now it's just too short for me to comment more. :) 'liked'.

    ps: read my "A Falling Rain Droplet" if you get chance please. thx. :D
    Luderas heart.
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    3 world war ended in chaos. That was the death of the earth... Millions of years later is the story of the 3 world war still told by creatures beyond imagination. According to them it was the beginning...
    Black Ink
    5 years ago
    Thanks for the comment :) I'll read your story too! And by the way, sorry if I spelled anything wrong, I'm from Denmark you see :D
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