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Budding writer and enthusiastic teacher to those who share my passion.

  • Rih Could
    4 years agoReply
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    'If I were prettier, you'd (you would) be with me' would be grammatically accurate... Don't know if your slip was intentional? Otherwise I really like the idea of this poem.
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    This Poem is for 'The BIG Poetry Competition'. So please like, fav ad comment. Thank You. Copyright (C)
  • Rih Could
    4 years agoReply
    I have read all your poems and I love the way you write. You have a great ability to manage the flow and rhythm of your work whilst some phrases (like 'distant joys') seem purposefully ambiguous and I am unsure of the meaning. However, that is exactly why your work is so enjoyable to read.

    I would really appreciate it if you cast your keen eye over my work - 'Reconstruction - and let me know what you think. I am aware it is not perfect so any feedback would be greatly appreciated!
    If We Should Sometime Meet
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  • Rih Could
    4 years agoReply
    Great effort here - your writing has create character in both its description and dialogue. Liked and faved. Why is some of your speech indented though?

    Please have a look at some of my work and let me know what you think - 'Reconstruction'
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    The world is at war and Reagal Black is just one of the millions fighting it.
  • Rih Could
    4 years agoReply
    Love this - great rhythm! Not sure if the end is a bit awkward though? 'the summer life' seems a bit forced? Not sure. Definitely food for thought though!

    I like it either way! Great job!
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    just a few random poems that I've written. none of them go together.
    Rih Could
    4 years ago
    No - I have now though! It's very powerful. Why have you omitted punctuation though?
    behindtheseblueeyes
    I don't know i just felt that poetry doesnt really need periods and commas because they are pauses and poetry should flow
    Rih Could
    4 years ago
    I disagree - I think punctuation enables the writer to guide the reader through the flow of the words and your words are really powerful! That doesn't mean I don't enjoy reading your work though!

    If you get the chance, please check out my work and let me know what you think - any feedback and, of course, likes/favourites would be great. 'Reconstruction' is currently entered into a competition so any help would be massively appreciated! Thanks.
  • Rih Could
    4 years agoReply
    I hope I was supposed to find this chapter humorous as I really did - no offence intended if not! Please ditch Anna; she's lovely but definitely not right for him!
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    If Tom is to get what he wants, he must first figure out who 'he' really is, and what it is that he's been looking for.
    Archi_Leach
    4 years ago
    It is supposed to be a bit funnier; a lull in the emotional intensity before ramping it back up! Don't worry - Anna won't be a permanent fixture. I think Tom himself knows she isn't right for him...

    Thanks so much for your ongoing support. It's kept me going.
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