FemaleMember since 21 Jan 13Last online 4 years ago

Eat or be eaten. Thus are the laws of Reality.

  • Reality
    4 years agoReply
    It's a harsh reality.
    Well written, just watch out for unneeded capital letters and oddly spaced paragraphs.
    Skinny Love
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    After being bullied for years about her weight, fourteen year old Madison Drew develops anorexia. A dangerous disease, anorexia could be the death of Madison unless she receives help. Fast. And then...
  • Reality
    4 years agoReply
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    Hmm, this is pretty good :) here's a little CC, I hope you do not mind.
    Instead of &, try to spell out 'and'.
    I would break this into paragraphs a bit more, it's easier to read :)
    When a person speaks, create a separate line for the spoken part.
    This story is actually quite good though, the plot is fun to read :) well penned.
    Inferno Soul
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    A troubled teen named Melody struggles to find her inner self on a life changing quest regarding her true identity after her parents tragic death. Misfortune and disaster follows the girl everywhere she...
    Eunis Naki Dreamchild
    Thank you, actually whe I read some of you guys books I saw that, it does make it A LOT easier to read, will do! :)
  • Reality
    4 years agoReply
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    This is amazing, I was pulled in from the beginning, all the way through the rest of the chapters. It was all great description, and just an overall very wrll written plot. It is thoroughly thought out and explained. Well done. It took me ages to finish, haha, I've been so busy, so I apologise again for that.
    In Sheep's Clothes
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    What better way to destroy an invading enemy, than to destroy it from within? [New installment every week!] Rated 15+: Contains use of strong language, Violence/Gore and references to Adult themes.
    Midnight Rogue
    4 years ago
    LOL, no problem. I go on and on xD The last full story i posted here was a total of 36 chapters xD This one's crossed that mark in my drafts. Thanks for the review, i was beginning to think this was getting boring lol
  • Reality

    mumbled "Mushi-Shi"

    4 years agoReply
    Great anime series...
    Reality
    4 years ago
    Sorry guys :) I have a lot of things going on right now.
    Well, he gave accurate and valid criticism Rawrz. Whether it was nice or not, well, haha, there are some people. Just so you know, you are very overprotective of your friends too, that might add a bit :D
    Midnight Rogue, it's quite hard to piss me off :)
    Midnight Rogue
    4 years ago
    xD Glad to hear it xD People who can take more, definately higher up on my list for recruit-options for mercenaries xD
    Reality
    4 years ago
    Rawrz–Yes. I now show up. If I am crazy, than so are you, but when I care at all, I'll tell you.
    It is quite hard to anger me :) you could try if you'd like, but you probably won't try at all. Is he bothering you again? I don't understand why he follows you around, and trust me, if I knew him in reality and not just virtually, I would strangle him smiling :) but since I don't, I'll curse him out instead (although why you don't block him is beyond me :/ just saying.)
    Midnight Rogue: Haha, thank you XD
  • Reality
    4 years agoReply
    Not bad, not bad at all.
    Odd spacing though, very odd spacing. Try to fix that somehow with the chance.
    Sometimes you have paragraphs that have another paragraph in them. Separate them, if you would, please.
    Quite good minus that.
    Fairmeadow
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    Breeze Bellamy lives in the idyllic village of Fairmeadow but her life is far from perfect. She used to have everything but slowly she's losing it all and she finds it hard to believe she'll ever regain...
    Robs
    4 years ago
    Thanks, I have no idea what's going on with the spacing. I'll try to fix it.
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