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Jeg har fornylig modtaget mit kørekort. Uuuh en dejlig følelse at kunne køre rundt i de store københavnske gader.
Jeg går i 3. G og skriver derfor mange rapporter. Jeg elsker at læse engelske bøger siden jeg er halv-amerikansk.

  • Døden som motiv
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  • Peyton
    5 years agoReply
    The way you use orthegraphic effects to highlight your point is really cool! The structure is tight and consistant, which leads the reader through the poem. Basically, I think you write excelently, becuase you have a wonderful understanding of words and structure. I LOVE IT! Keep going, because you have talent!
    Hallows Eve
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    A poem about Karma taking its toll on people who deserve it. For the Halloween competition.
    Bells Hunter
    5 years ago
    Wow thank you :)
  • Peyton
    5 years agoReply
    WOOW! I am totally impressed! I love the way you use flash blacks, and your descriptions. They are wonderful! I wish it was longer, though. I want to hear more about the father, the mother. When did these boyfriends dump her? When did she get teased by her classmates? It was over to soon! And why does she at last kill herself. It is very drastical, so i would like to know WHY? What lead her to deciding to kill herself?

    Anyway, i just love the story, it just wish it was longer, because I enjoyed it so much! Thanks for writing this, it is excellent!
    Beneath the Surface
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    Safety. Protection. Ever since her childhood, water has been her shelter. What's your sanctuary? This is a story written for XxJessxX's competition "JessComp", where I have chosen to write about...
    Bells Hunter
    5 years ago
    Thanks for the feedback, Peyton. I may write more, when I get the inspiration! Well, it was suppose to shine through the text, that she has always been unhappy, and then one day she decides she's happy in the water.
  • Peyton
    5 years agoReply
    Really great story, thanks for sharing! I hope you win.
    Blitz
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    What do you do when war destroys everything you love? Your home, your family, your life? Kate Rosenkranz lived in London in 1940, when the bombs fell from the sky, and ruined everything.
    Bells Hunter
    5 years ago
    Thank you for commenting, and thanks for the favoriting!
  • Peyton
    5 years agoReply
    It's really good. Do more though!! I want to hear the details of her thoughts... Get to know this girl. That would be really cool - You got the bones of the story, now it just needs meat.
    Twilight Woods
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    Run. The only thing you can do, when everything seems lost.
  • Peyton
    5 years agoReply
    I really like the thought behind it. The descriptions are wonderful!

    Maybe you could explain a little more. I think that would give the reader a clearer idea of what your trail of thought is! Still i love it!
    Twilight Woods
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    Run. The only thing you can do, when everything seems lost.
    Bells Hunter
    5 years ago
    thank you peyton, I'll try and do that :D
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