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Hi :) I have a really bad habit of adding a smiley face at the end of all my sentences *inserts smiley just to prove point* :) And I'm also really critical; I've probably deleted more movellas than I've got published. So if you can't find a movella that I've written, sorry about that.
I've started writing pretty much since I first learned how to do it. Even before then, I loved coming up with crazy imaginary games, and awesome fantasy lands (including a candy world, ruled by evil chocolate bars which later became my first ever story). But now that I'm older, I prefer writing more realistic stories. ...Anyway, if you need any help or want me to read a movella just ask! :)
Awards: Gold in the Different Sides of a Dispute competition and the Who Framed Klaris Cliff competition, and voted second best Critique Giver - Paper Awards 2014

Out of my movellas I recommend reading:
-->The New Me
--> The Piano

Twitter: @Ninaaknowles
Wattpad: Nina1277

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  • Ellie Inkwell
    1 months agoReply
    Hi! I just want say I'm trying out a writing game called 'One Liner' and I was wondering if you'd be interested in participating. Don't worry if you can't or whatever. It's hopefully going to be a monthly thing, so there's always next time if you can't do it this time. The rules are all here:
    One LinerOne Liner: the game that gets every writer writing. A random first line/sentence of a story is submitted, and then each participant goes away and writes...

    Ellie :)

  • Salamasunny
    4 months agoReply
    Just thought I'd let you know I'm hosting a Short-story/Poetry competition, where the winner will receive free books and feedback on all their movellas! Why not check it out?
    Short-Story/ Poetry Contest!Hello! As part of my college's IB Programme, I am required to conduct a project. I have decided to host a writing competition. The winners of this competi...

  • Nina :)
    5 months agoReply
    So far I've really enjoyed reading this!
    You managed to keep me engaged for pretty much the whole story so far. You have a great writing style, with beautiful description and imagery which really helped me picture the settings and characters. I also love how you added suspense throughout the story by not giving away too much.
    I found Kathy to be a very relatable person. Having a younger sister around Poppy's age, I felt like I could really connect with Kathy and how she feels over-protective over Poppy. As for Willow, I despise her. But I quite like how you made her seem a little bit more human when she confides to her friends about her escape. It would be interesting to find out if there's anything more to her later on, other than her being a bully.

    However there's a few thing worth mentioning that you might want to change.
    Although most of your description is great, occasionally you go a bit over the top with it when describing some characters. For example when you described James for the first time, some of it seemed a bit exaggerated - I understood that clearly he was a very attractive person, but in the current situation (seeing as she was still a bit intimidated and surprised at the time) she probably didn't really have an opportunity to examine him in such detail. In additon, the sentence, "he is so beautiful" just came off as a little cheesy to me, and could potentially put off future readers. Too much character description can also slow down the story, and when the characters are having a conversation at the time, it makes it seem like there are big pauses between each speech.

    I like how you try to steer away from making Kathy into a "mary-sue" character, and I like how she doesn't consider herself as pretty. However I found it a little unrealistic how Marcus had such and interest in her, seeing as he is supposedly very handsome and flirts with loads of girls. Perhaps you could mention how Marcus likes her just because of her body, perhaps by making him really cruel to her about it? On the other hand you could make him less attractive, but mention how he happens to have a knack of getting all the girls to like him? (except Kathy of course).

    I love the idea how all the students are almost being brain washed by the teachers due to all the strict rules and beatings, and how they aren't given too much detail about what's happening in the world outside. You really gave the impression of a distopian society - to be honest I'm just glad I don't have to experience anything like the characters in the story do!
    This is only a suggestion, but perhaps you could emphasize the schools distorted views of a perfect society even further in their teaching? For example in History lessons, perhaps the students could be taught about history that didn't actually happen, or events could be changed slightly to make them more "suitable" for the students?
    Otherwise, I really enjoyed reading this. You really have a knack for writing and I look forward to finding out what happens next! Update soon :)
    Safe Haven
    Safe Haven
    In pursuit of creating the perfect human, the government has set up special schools. Each student is fallen. They are the trash of society, the whores, the beggars, the murderers, the scum. Brought up...
    5 months ago
    To be honest, I don't know what that is haha! I live in a cave :P
    Nina :)
    5 months ago
    It's this thing where you try to write a novel in a month. You can set your own word limit, for example 50,000 words, then write a little every day.
    5 months ago
    Sounds cool))) I'll check it out now. Thanks :)
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