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  • MHun
    5 years agoReply
    Like! Like the structure, the hugely visual language, the drama. Beautiful work.
    But I no longer picture the devil and evil as something outside us like a monster. For me the poem would be more interesting and more true if it were the girl herself who created the drama, the evil, the pain, the death. How would the poem read then? Actually the poem already suggests this in the last line. Agree -- Keep going, because you have fabulous talent!!
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    A poem about Karma taking its toll on people who deserve it. For the Halloween competition.
    Bells Hunter
    5 years ago
    Wow, thanks for the feedback! I will definately look into that! Thanks!
  • MHun
    5 years agoReply
    Oooooooooooo. Sensual writing! I can feel the rain, the cold black water.
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    Safety. Protection. Ever since her childhood, water has been her shelter. What's your sanctuary? This is a story written for XxJessxX's competition "JessComp", where I have chosen to write about...
    Bells Hunter
    5 years ago
    Thank you MHun, that means a lot to me, thank you for commenting! :D
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