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  • lasmart
    1 years agoReply
    Thanks and i know but i thought most people reading would respond better to the recent artist. but thanks for the feed back! :)
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    Lyrics to some of the most popular songs around
  • lasmart
    1 years agoReply
    It's quite good but add more detail or time phrases I feels like your just stating the events with not much emotions.
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    My name is Jackson Browne Slayer of Angry Birds Enemy of the Dark Side My favourite colour's purple I can't stand Justin Bieber And I don't like sprouts. Any questions?
  • lasmart
    1 years agoReply
    Really good so far... You should develop the character more by relating the character to everyday sights or people's features, by going into more depth and using more smilies and metaphors. But apart from that its great.
    Please visit my movellas and give me info on mine by searching lasmart under people on this site. ;)
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    A mysterious classic story inspired by Private Peaceful by Micheal Morpugo. It's about a person falling of a cliff etc. Please, please feedback on how you think its going. I know chapter one isn't that...
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