FemaleUnited StatesMember since 2 Feb 13Last online 1 years ago

i kind of have a thing for youtubers, disney, and one direction
i also dabble in figure skating
oh and i believe in mermaids

  • lauranium
    4 years agoReply
    Hey, so I know you said you didn't actually write this, but you need to A) ask for permission before you copy someone else's work and post it on other website, and B) give credit to the person who wrote it (state their name/username), or you really could be considered plagiarizing. I know you meant absolutely no harm, but it's against the law to plagiarize in any way. Please just ask Wonderwall123 if you can post this on here and give her credit!
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    ∞∞∞∞This isn't my story i read it on wattpad a realized its not on here so i just wanted to share it with u guts∞∞∞∞ "Dont ever let anyone make you do anything you don't want to," A weak voice filled...
  • lauranium
    4 years agoReply
    I really like this, but there's one thing that has been hard for me to read: you're always changing the tenses. I'll give you an example.

    "Then, I look behind me to see if Kevin was following me, but thankfully he isn't so I just keep walking."

    In that sentence alone, you switched tenses three times (present, past, present). When writing a story you should keep the same tense throughout the entire thing!

    You should either change the sentence to "Then, I look behind me to see if Kevin //is// following me, but thankfully he isn't so I just keep walking." or "Then, I //looked// behind me to see if Kevin was following me, but thankfully he //wasn't// so I just //kept// walking." (The first one is present and the second is past)

    Just thought you'd like to hear what I think (not that I'm anything special), but I know what it's like as a writer when you just get comments saying, "UPDATE!!!!!"

    Keep writing!
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    After Halley escaped from the abuse in her foster home, she realized that she has to live the rest of her life on the streets with no job, no money, and no willing to help her. But that was until she meets...
    lauranium
    4 years ago
    Sorry if my comment was a little too much /: but no problem!
    heskiwi94x
    4 years ago
    It wasn't too much :)
    lauranium
    4 years ago
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    Okay, good! And I imagined Maia Mitchell as Halley, then I read the author's note in chapter 3, and just, idk, I had a tiny fangirl moment
  • lauranium
    4 years agoReply
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    Loveeeee ittt! So great! What did you use to make the cover?
    Better Than Words // Harry Styles *ON HOLD*
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    THE BLURB WAS TO LONG SO IT'S IN THE FIRST CHAPTER. In this fanfiction, One Direction does not exist. Only Harry will be in it. All credit for the song goes to One Direction. The credit for the lyric...
    lauranium
    4 years ago
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    That's okay!
  • lauranium
    4 years agoReply
    Wow, that was soooooooooooooooooooooooooooo good, I'm literally speechless... YOU'RE AN AMAZING WRITER! Good luck!! I really hope you win!

    Would you mind checking out my entry?
    All Of MeMy entry for the Movellas 48 hour Valentine's Day one shot competition
    Life Mission (Harry Styles one shot)
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  • lauranium
    4 years agoReply
    this is really great! looooove it!
    if you need a cover, click the link and fill out the form in chapter one :) I'd love to make one for you!
    Book Covers // OPENYou order; I make.
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    Meet Anna. Anna Is A Sophmore in Highschool. She's what you would refer her to as the "Good Girl" of the school with tons of friends. Then there's Wesley. Wesley Stromberg is the jock and also a Senior...
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