FemalePhilippinesMember since 9 May 12Last online 1 years ago

Please comment on my writing. I really want to improve!

  • kazhy419

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    2 years agoReply
    I deleted Long Live and created Wisdomatch, which is basically the same thing but with lots of plot changes and editing done.
  • kazhy419

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    2 years agoReply
    Changed the POV for Long Live from third person to first person. My attempt failed but I believe it's for the better; I just realized writing in first person adds mystery to the story. And mystery is one of the things I'm aiming for.
  • kazhy419
    2 years agoReply
    I want more! XD Your detailing is so good it makes me envious; I'm very bad at it, as you'll see if you read my works. Oh well, I'm waiting to read more of this ^^
    Empire State of Love
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    The boy's glacier blue eyes pierced through the girl's opposite him. She was sipping a large hot chocolate, a bobbly scarf wrapped tightly around her white neck. She lowered her eyes to try and avoid his...
    Amber Writes™
    2 years ago
    Thanks! And no your description is brill just read one! Anyways I'll be posting some more in a bit:)
  • kazhy419

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    2 years agoReply
    Just posted the first chapter of Long Live (working title). I think it's too short for a first chapter but whatever. I cut it at just the right moment... I think XD
  • kazhy419

    Comments?

    2 years agoReply
    I just posted the first chapter of the novel I'm working on. Hope you could all check it out. Here's the link:
    Long LiveAstrid and Vic, two teens hard at work to make ends meet, get the ultimate chance to redeem themselves and provide easier lives for their families.


    Thanks in advance! ^^
    tayswizle
    2 years ago
    I've just started one of my books too "Never Grow Up", could you check it out and give it a comment? I'd much appreciate it, I'll check out your book in the favour :)
    Bash
    2 years ago
    PLEASE COULD YOU ALL CHACK OUT 'Dragon Scales' IT'S FOR THE FICTION COMP! PLEASE ONLY STARTED IT TODAY SO I'M REALLY BEHIND! PLEASE LIKE, ADD TO FAVES, READ AND COMMENT!! please please please!
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