FemaleCanadaMember since 23 Aug 14Age 19Last online 1 years ago

  • Katie_@5SOS
    2 years agoReply
    1 Like
    Your story is great so far, but I think u say "then" and "when" too much. U also say exactly everything that happens which isn't necessarily bad but kind of gets boring after a while. I think u should try and slow down with the story a bit so that your readers can connect with the characters and what they're feeling a little bit better. Don't take this the wrong way, in not trying to say ur writing is terrible or anything- but I think u could improve in these areas to captivate your readers a little more.
    "Not my Type."
    "Not my Type."
    1462
    668.4k
    1174
    I closed my locker door and saw Luke leaning against the locker. Great. He pushed me against my locker and said "So have you thought about my offer yet?" I looked up at Luke and said "Luke, you're not...
    Katie_@5SOS
    2 years ago
    One more thing, in Australia seasons are reversed, meaning that Christmas is in summer where there isn't school
  • Katie_@5SOS
    2 years agoReply
    Plzzzzz updaaaaate
    No Strings Attached ♧ c.h
    No Strings Attache...
    213
    8294
    130
    (n) a sexual relationship without being emotionally involved; two good friends that have meaningless sex with no feelings whatsoever ∞ © Cuddling With Niall All Rights Reserved (Contains sex...
  • Katie_@5SOS
    2 years agoReply
    Yayayayayay!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Update plx
    Elysian ✩ 5sos
    Elysian ✩ 5sos
    165
    36.3k
    230
    elysian (adj.) beautiful or creative; divinely inspired; peaceful and perfect ∞ SEQUEL TO AMNESIA; Courtney Winston, a seventeen year old girl who fell in love and hurt the people around her. After...
  • Katie_@5SOS
    2 years agoReply
    Update!!!!!! Plzelz
    "Not my Type."
    "Not my Type."
    1462
    668.4k
    1174
    I closed my locker door and saw Luke leaning against the locker. Great. He pushed me against my locker and said "So have you thought about my offer yet?" I looked up at Luke and said "Luke, you're not...
Loading ...