FemaleMember since 6 Jul 12Age 44Last online 5 years ago

Just an average person who is addicted to reading and playing World of Warcraft. I have always dabbled in writing and I loved writing in high school and college. Sometimes I have fantasy's about becoming a writer someday.

  • Kaisumi
    5 years agoReply
    This is really good. I think I am going to re-read it and then read some of your other work. Unfortunately I have to get ready to do some stuff in real life. I'll check back as soon as I can to read the rest of your works. It looks like you and I have a similar writing style. Which for me makes the read flow and is easier because it is the way our own mind works thru memories and thoughts. So instead of just reading the story you get the feel of living the story. Thanks so much for sharing!
    The Terror Within
    The Terror Within
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    This is also a World of Warcraft based story, set slightly after The Hunt Never Ends and is actually tied in to that book. A simple telling of the horror one must feel when they realize the life they now...
  • Kaisumi
    5 years agoReply
    You have a lot of spelling mistakes in here. You might want to use a spell checker before you submit your work. Also, your chapters are so small. Have you considered making this a short story with only one page (which would be only one chapter in this format for Movella)? I think this would help the flow of your story better and then you could add more details to your story. Thanks for sharing your work!
    The end of time
    The end of time
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    Mary Whinslington is just an ordinary girl. Well, she WAS. After school one day, she walks into a wall. Is it just an ordinary wall? I guess you'll have to read the story...
  • Kaisumi
    5 years agoReply
    Everyone already gave you feedback on the very same things I noticed. Do you use a word program that helps you with grammar and spelling? I highly recommend using a program and then putting your work in here for submission. I like your story but you left it off like a cliff hanger! Will you be adding to the story and giving it a finishing touch in the future? I'd love to read on and see how you end this adventure. Thanks for sharing. Would you mind reading mine it is titled Moon Council. It is my first attempt at writing a fictional story. Like you I chose to narrate my work. Thanks for sharing your story with us and I hope to hear feedback from you as well!
    Underneath The Costume
    Underneath The Cos...
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    Will she make it or will she fail miserably? The poor life of the girl next door is finally revealed. Can she defeat her enemys or is she too weak?
    Denley
    5 years ago
    I will use microsoft word in the future, thank you for reading my story, i appreciate your feeback. I will check out your story some time soon :)
    Denley
    5 years ago
    I will use microsoft word in the future, thank you for reading my story, i appreciate your feeback. I will check out your story some time soon :)
  • Kaisumi
    5 years agoReply
    I love how you were narrating your story. However, the storyline felt a bit choppy as I was wondering how you jumped from one topic or time frame to the next without having anything to lead it into the next portion of your story. Have you thought about using a paragraph at the end of each section that purposely builds the reader up to the next step of your story? I think this would work much better for you. There are some grammatical errors in there that you might want to correct. Even I do that and it is so helpful for me when someone points them out. Sometimes I get in the groove of typing out my thoughts and my thoughts move faster than my fingers upon the keyboard. I think your story is interesting. Thanks for sharing!
    The Blackout
    The Blackout
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    In there they where waiting, waiting for that one signel...
    Kaisumi
    5 years ago
    Ahh see there I go with my brain and fingers not working well again while trying to explain that point to you. Go figure! *laughs at herself*
    J.M Greenwood
    5 years ago
    haha, thanks for the comments i will try to change them. no problem :)
  • Kaisumi
    5 years agoReply
    I read and understood when the deadline is; however, I didn't see a date given for when we will find out the results of the competition. Does anyone know this? Also, Do we get any feedback from the judges on our work even if we don't win? Or do we just have to wonder about it?
    Sabitha.K
    5 years ago
    mostly the next day
    Charles Mesa
    5 years ago
    Well, it is indeed the next day and still, there is no title to be had. So I would imagine we just wait until they are done. These are a no-barrier-to-entry competitions, that being so I would imagine that there is no set deadline for the reason that there could've been anywhere between zero to an infinite amount of entries. So, we wait.
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