MaleUnited KingdomMember since 3 Jul 15Last online 2 years ago

Head down, pen down. I just wanna do some writing, so let's see how this goes!

Previously known as eclecticboy, used this site a few years ago, but decided to leave. Miss me?

:P

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  • Kai C
    2 years agoReply
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    This is very well written, and as a writer, you show great potential. Admittedly, there are a few grammatical slips, and a couple of rough edges, but these will all be sanded out during a thorough editing session.

    My main criticism of this piece would be the tone. It seems a little childish, with the scenario being so clichéd. I would recommend finding a very specific focus point or theme to revolve your book around, and make it stick out from others. As it currently stands, there is little to differentiate it from other stories of a similar concept and genre.

    However, with this said, these are problems that can simply be fixed with writing experience. I would recommend practice describing typically mundane scenarios and days, and making them interesting. It is a much greater skill to make the mundane amazing, than retain the excitement of a typically exciting scenario.
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    Let me tell you something: you know history, you live in it every day. But you don't know the future. But there are people who do, people who are shaping it right now. All you have to do is wait, and the...
    Cāngkù Shísān
    Thank you
    I shall use your feedback during writing

    As for the clichéd storyline, it starts off that way, but will quickly become dark and complex. I always do that
  • Kai C

    So, er... Remember me, Eclecticboy?

    2 years agoReply
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    Hello!

    So, I was a fairly active member of this site, and then left for a bit. (I then came back, left, came back again, left again etc., but that's kinda irrelevant. :P)

    But anyway, I'm back now! Maybe for a day, a week, a month or a year, but I'm currently online, so hey. :D How are you all doing?


    -Kai C (AKA Eclecticboy)-
    Prithu
    2 years ago
    The Date with Mary JaneA young man meets his fantasy in a way he never thought possible.
    Moosey
    2 years ago
    Welcome back! :D
    DragonSoulJess
    2 years ago
    YESSSSS I REMEMBER YOU!!!! :D

    You took part in the No Movellas December thing, right? :P
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