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  • Juniper Berry
    I just noticed 'A 18 year old' should be 'An 18 year old' and 'they try force me' should be 'they try to force me' but they're just small things! Also, the rhythm's a bit uneven in places, but if you prefer it that way then leave it as you wish - nice poem, I like the irony in the last line :)
    Happy 18th
    Happy 18th
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    Thought I'd start with something a bit depressing to get my self on the map. As for the actual words, its true i have arthritis (Ankylosing Spondylitis) But in reality I'm pass the depression stage. As...
    Zakieson
    6 years ago
    Thanks for the comment, yeah i'll edit the 'force me' line, but the first line has 'pathetic' in it, so im not sure about 'An'. Yeah i was going for a slow rhythm if thats helps to read it :)
  • Juniper Berry
    I don't think perched is the right word to use in the sentence 'tears perched in my eyes' ... it's not the right context for the word. Tears pricked the corners of my eyes? Something like that anyway.
    The Shattering of A Heart
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    Rosa is going through her first break-up, she has a hard time getting over it. Will she? Or will she continue loving the one that shattered her heart?
    AliceMay Jones
    6 years ago
    I used the word to say tears sat in her eyes.
  • Juniper Berry
    Oh my gosh this is amazing! I can really feel your angst!
    Being dumped is like a kick to the head.
    Being dumped is...
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    Really unhappy angsty poetry, which is the only remainder of a really horrible relationship from two years ago. Mock 'em, they're pathetic.
    amoergo
    6 years ago
    Aww thankyou. I feel pretty angsty thankyou.
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