FemaleMember since 19 May 12Age 21Last online 5 years ago

Hi!
I'm here predominantly to write fanfictions. Now, the first thing you may notice is there may not necessarily be anything ironic about my writing, hence my name. (Actually that is a bit ironic)
I just picked it because it's a nice word.

My favourite topic to write about at the moment is the Discworld Series, by Terry Pratchett. It's the best thing ever!!!

Any comments anybody would care to leave would be much appreciated, though I may not reply to all of them. You can be assured that I'll read them and take on board any criticism given.

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  • Living with Teatime Journal
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  • Ironic
    5 years agoReply
    How very interesting. I like your concept and the format of this piece. There's just a few errors I can point out in way of grammar and use of words, e.g. "I need some of your's", it should just be yours, "survival of the fittest only they deserve to live," between "fittest" and "only" there should be a full stop or a semi colon I think.
    Also, you don't need to capitalise words like "him and her," it's only the word "I" that needs to be capitalised because it's a standalone letter and referns to oneself.
    All in all though, I really liked this. It was interesting, a bit of lack of detail, i.e. what happened to the other people?
    If there's more coming, I look forward to reading more of it. :-)
    Seven Deadly Virtues
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    There are 7 rules. Break one and the penalty? Death. Thrown into a new world, as a slave to a powerful lord, Astella is forced to adapt... in more than one way. I'd appreciate constructive...
    Lotts
    5 years ago
    Thankyou! I appreciate all the constructive criticism and I'm really glad you like it! :)
    Ink.Heart.<3
    5 years ago
    Wow really loved reading this Lotts great work you totally need more credit for this! get your story out there wow I love how Astella is pressured on all these rules and her life is cleary set out for her she must obtain to be obedient and follow by them and what will happen now ...a cat!! Great idea keep it up I enjoyed reading this alot thanks xxxx haha
    Lotts
    5 years ago
    Thankyou so much, you are so kind! I really appreciate you saying that and reading it!! thanks!! xxx
  • Ironic
    5 years agoReply
    Wow, that's very interesting. I can see the slow downward spiral this girl's views life is taking and how the ways of the world are starting to challenge her views on life.
    Especially in entry #4, the contrast between the two entries and the conflicts of emotion vs the views she had been brought up to learn really sparks a change we see in this character.
    I'd be very interested to learn what happens next and how Eve will cope with it.
    Keep writining I say!
    Eve's Diary
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    (This is NOT my diary, even though it seems quite realistic I suppose:) ) Eve is religious, different and her own person. That's why she keeps her diary. A new diary entry for each day:-)
    Amber Writes™
    5 years ago
    thankyou!:-) I will!
  • Ironic
    5 years agoReply
    Wow, very interesting idea, so strange yet so common. Is Adnarim really a spirit come to haunt her or is she the embodiment of all of Miranda's troubles whom she herself has developed into a spectre as some kind of explanation for her behaviour, i.e. the criticising self voice in her head that has become something more? Not to say that Miranda is schizophrenic, but more just deppressed?
    Your Own Worst Enemy
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    Miranda is the daughter of one of the most famous actresses in the world, but her life is far from fabulous. The girls at school bully her mercilessly. Yet that is not her worst problem. Adnarim, a malevolent...
    R K Guron
    5 years ago
    Thank you for commenting, and it is very interesting to see what you make of it :) It is now finished if you'd like to read the rest :)
  • Ironic
    5 years agoReply
    How very interesting, I do see potential for a good story in this and I can see where you're going with this a little bit. But if I were you I'd brush up on my grammar a bit, because I found the second chapter, personally a bit hard to understand. I think it might just be a bit of formatting and punctuation, but any reader that reads this is starting from scratch on information and everything that's happening needs to be doubley clear on what's happening.

    This is constructive criticism only and I hope you don't take it as an insult.
    Before
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    Hi my names Alicia and i'm a living ghost. In 1973 Alicia died but came back as her same self. When Alicia goes back to her original high school- Rose Elizabeth High- shes in for a suprise. A girl in...
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