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save me, save you

(hi I'm rod I'm a solid 6/10 so go ahead and talk to me if you want thank you you're all beautiful)

  • .Rod
    11 months agoReply
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    okay firstly WTNV is beautiful and precious omg but also DO YOUR HISTORY MATE
    .Rod
    11 months ago
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    YOU CAN DO IT JESS

    I have history I'm totally blanking atm too though dw

    AND IKR OMG ARE YOU UP TO DATE IT'S SO GOOD
    DragonSoulJess
    11 months ago
    YEAH JUST A FEW MORE PAGES TO GO

    woo yay i'm not alone :D xD

    I'M NOT I THINK I'M AT ABOUT 30 BUT UGHHHH A-LEVELS AND LIKE I COULD LISTEN ON THE WAY TO COLLEGE BUT THEN I KNOW I'D ALSO STOP IN THE MIDDLE OF THE ROAD TO FANGIRL AND I'D GET RUN OVER
    DragonSoulJess
    11 months ago
    I ONLY HAVE LIKE 4 MORE PAGES TO TAKE NOTES ON I'M GOING STRONG :'D
  • .Rod
    1 years agoReply
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    Holy hell you managed to demonstrate/create a whole world in like 1-2k words that's... really admirable and this is genuinely so good wow and poor faizah :( she doesn't deserve this

    But ummm feedback okay so FIRSTLY the 'Again and again and-' line was like so good just I love that style and the repetition and Yes umm as for like cc I have not much honestly um to get like really nit-picky when you used 'pioneer their only lives' it sorta felt a little out of place with the whole broken english like spontaneous style Faizah has as a voice

    And also the italicised paragraph beginning with 'I remember the moon' felt sorta more? refined than the other pgraphs which isn't like Bad obviously but it did confuse me for a bit (probably because I'm tired tbh) and it didn't feel as much like faizah speaking as the other paragraphs?

    Idk honestly these are just things where the voice felt a tiny bit off for me personally throughout, if that makes sense, but overall like this is so good and again you are insanely good at simultaneously character building and world building like woah and really good luck with the competition of course
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    I whispers my name like a war cry.
    Mirlotta
    1 years ago
    thank you so much!! and yeah I know what you mean about the style, I generally write in 3rd person so giving Faizah a vaguely stylistic voice got more and more difficult as I got tireder and tireder haha (tireder is such a weird looking word. is it actually even a word?? my autocorrect isn't trying to correct it, but then again my autocorrect is shite soooo)
    and I'll try and change those bits to fit better with the rest of it in the morning when I am awake!! thank you again and good luck to you to ((:
    Mirlotta
    1 years ago
    *too aRREGGHHH my terrible after-eight-o'clock grammar strikes again
    .Rod
    1 years ago
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    tireder sounds like a word and if it isn't it SHOULD be a word
    but yes no problem I honestly love it it was so good and same to your feeback thank you so much I'll get to changing the bits you specified asap because I totally agree the phone call was my attempt at getting across a different voice but it could be improved and reading back, the ironically, ... line doesn't really fit with the rest
  • .Rod

    mumbled "Ayy "

    1 years agoReply
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    my new phone came today time to Wreak Havoc
    Prodigy
    8 months ago
    Did you delete your facebook?/is everything okay? i am concerned
    TiaElise
    3 months ago
    he's still alive I think, I'm sure I saw him before the exam yesterday, and he sent streaks this morning XD
    Prodigy
    3 months ago
    Oh he came back to facebook and we've talked since then, all is well :) But thanks!! How are you??
  • .Rod
    1 years agoReply
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    (I'm two chapters in and I 100% support the decision to get a kitten also this is so good so far)
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    Emilie Jones was just seven years old when she was diagnosed with potentially life threatening cancer. When Make-A-Wish Foundation grant Emilie one wish, she is overjoyed at the possibilities she has-but...
    .Rod
    1 years ago
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    The 'I want it for you so you have someone to cuddle when...' line OH MY GOD why do you have to do this :'( :'( (this is sad but Amazing)
    Smudged Bandit
    1 years ago
    Blame May for doing Emilie's chapters haha
    And thank you ^-^
    May Hayashi
    1 years ago
    XD I'm so evil
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