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  • i do not exist
    An interesting response to traditional war poetry, but the "thou"s and "thee"s and "thine"s really don't work - even if you were writing during the First World War, such ancient language would be unnecessary. Also, your iambic pentameter isn't perfect, the foot not always landing on every second syllable, which makes reading a little uncomfortable.
    A sonnet for My Love
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    A sonnet to show the deep love and affection one woman has for her husband who is away at war. He dies. This sonnet shows her recolection of what had been and what is to be. I wrote this sonnet in a shakespearian...
  • i do not exist
    Your iambic pentameter isn't perfect, as the foot doesn't always land on every second syllable, which throws the sonnet out of time and makes reading a little uncomfortable. The idea is good, though.
    I write Sonnets
    I write Sonnets
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    A Sonnet about sonnets
  • i do not exist
    You do not use iambic pentameter, or the Shakespearian/Petrarchan rhyme scheme - all of which is fine, it is a contemporary sonnet. However, the lines seem contorted which affects the meaning and the sense of genuine feeling in the poem ("then he is far from reaching it" seems an awkward phrase.) Maybe just redraft and go wild on it, experiment more.
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    My entry for the Valentine's Day competition. My sonnet in the style of Shakespeare's Sonnet 130. Please like, as even being the 3rd runner up would be amazing!:)
  • i do not exist

    Wy do all the poems on Movellas rhyme?

    Just wondering, as rhyme is really quite scarce in the world of contemporary poetry. Let me know your thoughts...
    JCesq
    4 years ago
    The cultural origins of Movellians tend to vary a great deal, and the world of contemporary poetry tends to be quite reserved, and many do not have access to it, except maybe through the internet, and even then, reading the "classics" is a big temptation. It's true, however that Movellas might be in a better shape should everyone read contemporary stuff.
    i do not exist
    4 years ago
    Fair enough - it is surprising though, then, that there are not so many specific forms in play, I haven't come across many sonnets or haiku.
    Elizabeth Marcellus
    It may be true that not many of the poets on Movellas have read much contemporary poetry. Also, the rhyming, four-lines-per-stanza poetry is easier for some people to write.
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