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  • Harry Smiles
    Just fantastic, this completely draws me in, great story and brilliant writing.
    Across the ocean (15+)
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    It is usually no big deal for Zayn Malik to sleep with girls every now and then, but when one of his one night stands turns out to be one of One Direction's new make up artists, things turn out a little...
  • Harry Smiles
    This is an exciting story and you tell it well, beautifully written with just the right amount of detail and it grabs the reader's interest and attention throughout. I only have two comments 1. It might be worth considering splitting the longer chapters as shorter ones work better on tablets and smart phones, as I travel a lot this is what I usually read on - though this might be difficult given the epic scope, and 2. Think about giving your chapters titles appropriate to the content so the reader has a rough guide as to what to expect - it makes the table of contents a route map to the book as well.
    The Gilded Blade
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    On the day Mali's mother was murdered, blood ran from her wounds, dripping onto Mali's face. Through rivulets of red, Mali watched the life fade from her mother's eyes. Now Mali only sees her mother in...
    DysfunctionalDreamer
    To be honest, I hadn't even thought about splitting it up. I tried to download the app but I have a windows phone so I wasn't able to test it out. I'll do it now. I'm pretty sure there are a few spots that would be good stopping points. Chapter titles I did consider, but I couldn't think of anything that didn't sound lame. I'll go back and give it another go :)

    Thank you so much for reading, and for your comments. I hope you enjoy the next updates too! :D


  • Harry Smiles
    Interesting idea, but would it not be self-defeating? Surely if the non-fan fiction writers take the whole of December off, all that will be published here will be fan fiction and nothing else. Just a thought...
    A Plea For Help
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    Movellas is going through a dark period at the moment.
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