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  • haineko
    3 years agoReply
    1 Like
    It's an extract for a comp, it probably won't be updated.
    Say Her Name
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    Roberta 'Bobbie' Rowe is not the kind of person who believes in ghosts. A Halloween dare at her ridiculously spooky boarding school is no big deal, especially when her best friend Naya and cute local boy...
  • haineko
    3 years agoReply
    Hey, just entered my story "The Other". Some criticism would be nice, I guess?
    3 SECOND LUKE
    3 years ago
    @haineko Read for Read, comment for comment? - Like for Like? :P
    Here's my entry, I'll read yours, if you read mine.
    EARTH UNDERWORLD ZThroughout a city full of lives and happy thoughts. A new shadow forms over the cities and is breaking throughout to the other planets. Their planet, Earth...
    haineko
    3 years ago
    Sure!
  • haineko
    3 years agoReply
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    Sorry, nitpicking here - "prized" should be "prised". Also, less complicated words - it slows the pace of the story a little, especially early on. Other than that, it's slightly confusing but enjoyable! Write more, Darlington! (I refuse to acknowledge the name Layton).
    Chaos
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    'Once the game is over, the king and the pawn go back in the same box.' "Ah, well, hello, everyone. Uhm, welcome to the Rehab Centre for Fictional Characters. Uhm, alright, let’s just get right...
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