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  • H.E.B.
    2 years agoReply
    A few grammatical errors, but you perfectly described how Petunia and Vernon would react. I'm not sure Dudley was that close to Harry, but I want you to continue!
    Katerina Dursley
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    Katerina Dursley is the daughter of Dudley and Melanie Dursley. When Kat is eleven she gets a strange letter from a school called Hogwarts. How will Kat deal with the fact that she's a witch? How will...
  • H.E.B.
    2 years agoReply
    I've been looking at your story comments and stuff, and I notice your really into Hogwarts fanfiction!
    Josienee 2001
    2 years ago
    Yeah I guess, I got an app on my kindle called "The Wizarding World of Harry Potter" that was an app for this website, and since that was harry potter I looked for harry potter stuff. But I also read some different things like Vampire Diaries things!
  • H.E.B.
    2 years agoReply
    Nice story! The plot is nice, and the prologue sort of set it up. Maybe (and I don't know if you already are going to do this) you could explain why she goes to Beauxbatons and her siblings go to Hobwarts?
    Scarlett Rose
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    Scarlett is a Malfoy, that's right her father is Draco Malfoy and her mother was Caroline Malfoy nee Green. Scarlett has two brothers, one older named Scorpius and one younger named Danial. Scorp has always...
    Josienee 2001
    2 years ago
    okay I'll try to work that in somewhere. thanks for the feedback!
  • H.E.B.
    2 years agoReply
    I like the story, and your writing style. The non-memories really show how much Arthur's death crush her, and the memories show who Arthur was. I really liked the last memory in the chapter, and how it showed that Anna and her brother had become strangers.
    Long Lost
    Long Lost
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    *for project remix - inspired by Heroic by Phil Earle* Anna and her little brother Arthur - two people who were always there for each other. But, when she needs him most, where is he? A tale of strength,...
    nostomanias
    2 years ago
    Thank you!
    I was quite worried that it wasn't clear. I have this habit of being worried that I'm being too subtle or not subtle enough. So thank you. :)
  • H.E.B.
    2 years agoReply
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    I like the way you show each character's style. Each character has a different voice.
    The Dying Games
    The Dying Games
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    Twenty four kids. New rules. The Hunger Games has returned-and worse than before.Allies. Traitors. Deaths. The Dying Games has begun.(Comment on anything you want to happen in the Games.)
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