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I live in the North-West of England, within a bubble no one, no matter how good looking, can penetrate. People (I dunno who exactly – they’re just people) say I have a big heart, but I don’t know what gives them that impression, as my heart would actually have to be outside of my body in order for them to have seen its size, which would have been a tad bit bloody. I am an only child surrounded by a sea of step-siblings, and only talk to people when absolutely necessary. And by absolutely necessary, I mean never, as almost nothing is more important than my fantasies.

  • Gemma T. Tracey
    Oh wow. This is beautifully crafted, and I am not surprised you won the comp. You are very talented, and you will do well in the future. Liked and favourited.
    One for Sorrow
    One for Sorrow
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    A poem I wrote when my grandmother passed away. It was the first time I'd experienced the death of someone close to me, and to me it felt like a bizarre, painful coming-of-age experience - part of me managed...
  • Gemma T. Tracey
    Wow, I love the plot, and that twist at the end really caught me off guard! The title is great, and I think you built up suspense really well. Just read over it to fix any errors, and I'm sure you will do well in the comp! Could you read my entry 'Hallowed Demise'? It's a poem, and I would really appreciate some feedback. Thanks, and liked.
    Skype-mare
    Skype-mare
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    A normal Skype session with a friend. What could possibly go wrong when Alex decides to meet up with her boyfriend after arranging a date on the webcam? How could she have fathomed what happens to her...
    Supernaturalgirl
    5 years ago
    thanks for the vote of confidence gemma! and ill definitely check out your poem :) take care!
  • Gemma T. Tracey
    Oh, those poor children. I got chills when I read this, and I could really empathise with little Tilly. Maybe not so much Tommy, but his role in the story is important so he needs to stay. Maybe add more depth to his feelings? This is just my opinion, and I always try to give constructive criticism. Hope you do well in the comp! Could you read my entry, 'Hallowed Demise'? I would love to hear your feedback. Thanks!
    Trick or Treat?
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    Tilly was finally big enough to trick-or-treating on her own. But she didn't know what she would find in the coffee shop. (my horror comp entry)
  • Gemma T. Tracey
    You asked me to read this, and I am glad you did. This is a very good idea, and I have to admit I was very excited when I read the word 'wolf'. However, you need to watch your punctuation, and maybe extend your chapters, so to add more depth into the detail of the descriptions. Overall, I quite liked it, and it is definitely an idea with promise and potential. I will be watching to see where you take this. Could you read my new poem 'Hallowed Demise'? I would really appreciate any feedback. Thanks, and good job!
    If I survive
    If I survive
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    its about a girl name Rosealinda. Rose for short. She grew up living in a wolf pack and when she is just months from going through the wolf transformation a tracker comes and marks rose. Which is impossible....
    jewlz
    5 years ago
    Thanks you for reading it! I will take a look at your poem. i'm terrible at punuation, thank you for the advice!
  • Gemma T. Tracey
    The title is great, and I like the short chapters as it makes it easier to read, and keeps the pace going. Liked, and good luck in the comp. I have entered too, with my poem 'Hallowed Demise'. Could you read it, and give me some feedback? Thanks.
    The Mists Of Decay
    The Mists Of Decay
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    The mists of decay will come. Adam Lephort is a normal guy who has just moved house. He works at a company which make nappies. He likes to think that. But the house he moved into isn't a normal house....
    cinerella8
    5 years ago
    really good ive entered as well with a story called secrets
    cinerella8
    5 years ago
    could u read my secrets
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