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  • EnchantedCroissant
    This seems like an amazing story, You might need to develop it a bit more though as your chapters are VERY short. Your story has many spelling and grammar mistakes and it does not flow very well, this may be a problem as some people will stop reading as soon as the story stops flowing or has too many mistakes. you should try reading your story out loud to someone else or yourself to see if you can read it exactly how you wrote it.

    Thank you for you time in reading this its completely your choice on whether to listen to me and I'm sorry if I come off as judgemental I just want to help fellow writers to continue bettering their work for others full enjoyment.
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    It's 2533 on planet earth, However over the years an extraterrestrial race has taken over the planet. Only one percent of the human race remains on the earth. The remaining one percent is expected...
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