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Just a normal 14 year old girl who has written a few stories because I have been inspired by my friend Ashleigh. I read her stories and love them, which makes me want to write too. I have written a few stories and put them on movellas to see what others think of them :) thanks for reading my movellas, and have a look at Ashleigh's too! her movellas name? Ashleight607 !!! :)

Also, check out Ryan642 and Morgan.Barnett because they have awesome movellas too!! :)

thanks for checking out my movellas too!!!! :) xxxxxxx

  • Emma389
    5 years agoReply
    i also think the chapters are a bit muddled, and you could have written more about her relationship with her dad and so on, as the chapters don't seem to connect as well as they should do.
    My World is With You
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    A story about 14 year old Elena and her best friend Grace. Elena and Grace have been best friends forever each would do anything for each other but when Elena feelings change for Grace will the friendship...
    Sabitha.K
    5 years ago
    thanks for the cc
  • Emma389
    5 years agoReply
    i love it! :)
    my only bad thing is there are a lot of things in here you could write more about or add more detail here and there. I would have liked to know your perspective on how Grace looked: her hair, her eyes or even her style of clothes, just minor details i think makes a story extra special :)
    Also, the way you describe their relationship from the start onwards already gives me the impression they love each other, not that they are best friends.
    overall i it, its amazing! :) the way you have written it, its amazing!
    My World is With You
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    A story about 14 year old Elena and her best friend Grace. Elena and Grace have been best friends forever each would do anything for each other but when Elena feelings change for Grace will the friendship...
  • Emma389

    mumbled "hello"

    5 years agoReply
    hey guys, im starting a new movella so please take time to read it! :)
    also read my other stories i have not finished that i have added a new chapter to! :)
    THANKS <3
  • Emma389
    5 years agoReply
    arghhh, i love this, i LOOOOOOVE it infact :D xxx
    Hangover
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    A young group of friends decide to break into and camp out in there high school, but when they wake up, something's very wrong.
    Morgan.Barnett
    5 years ago
    thank you emma :3 x
  • Emma389
    5 years agoReply
    i am in love with this story so far!! :) there is only one thing, try to use more punctuation because i get a bit confused about where sentences started and when hey ended, but the story is really well written!!! :) :) :) please write more!! :)
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    CAN YOU COMMENT AND LIKE WHAT YOU THINK :mickey was just an ordianry girl she is bullied and her life seems glum until a bright light called daniel emerges and makes colours fly that is until emotions...
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