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Hi everyone! I dabble in many genres- from One Direction fanfiction to sci-fi to superheros- and I have been writing as long as I could hold a pen. Hope you enjoy my work!

  • Elizabeth Hale
    Wow it's so interesting to see how the story evolved from your first draft to the new one. You have an amazing idea and the writing skills to tell the story beautifully!
    Insanity's Wish
    Insanity's Wish
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    All hope is lost. After twenty years of fighting for their rights, the Daevana- a race able to channel the power of the Gods themselves- are slowly falling back. With the capture of their leader and Commander,...
    NamesFromGraves
    1 months ago
    Thank you so much! I'm really glad you enjoyed the story!
  • Elizabeth Hale
    You have a great start! I'm interested to see where you take this idea. The only criticism I have is that some of your sentences are very short. I know it's a little picky, but short sentences are great for action, like in your first chapter, but for slower scenes or exposition I would switch it up a bit to longer sentences. You adjusted it later in your story, but just something to consider :P Keep up the great work!
    An In Between
    An In Between
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    Serafina Hollows was never considered as someone normal. Much less when she starts hearing voices. Talking to herself, or him. She starts blacking out and appearing in abandoned chapels covered in blood...
    Jiangxi
    1 months ago
    Thanks! I really appreciate the comments and the recommendations. Its my first movellas but I hope that it gets better :)
  • Elizabeth Hale
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    I've only just started to read this and I am excited about the concept. The first chapter alone really sets the mood, and the way that you wrote it, it had a great flow and almost conversational tone. I'm in love with this writing style :O I will definitely be back to read more later
    The Secret Sellers
    The Secret Sellers
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    Once upon a time an old woman foretold a world where monsters ruled. And they did. The fairy tales from history seemed to foretell the mutations of the future. Forests grew large and dark and within them,...
  • Elizabeth Hale
    You really created some beautiful imagery. I felt as though I could see it so your word choice definitely paid off! Is this a one-shot or is it setting up a story?
    Broken Chains
    Broken Chains
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    Thane was death: moving swiftly and gracefully to her final destination. To take yet another life...
    Cellakins
    1 months ago
    Thank you! :) &It's setting up for a story, but i've changed the original slightly to fit the challenge of the competition :D
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