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  • edamamebean
    4 years agoReply
    What an exciting chapter! I liked the way you used punctuation effectively in the dialogue to make the characters more vivid; I could almost hear them! Don't be afraid to use some simpler vocabulary if it improves the flow of your writing. Maybe read your story aloud to see how it sounds.
    Eye of a Boy: Blood Wars
    Eye of a Boy: Bloo...
    Robert Cousins was an ordinary, adolescent pupil at St. Joseph's High School until he encountered a malevolent Hell-hound on a mission to slaughter two innocent men. Or so he thought. With him and his...
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