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  • desauteles
    1 years agoReply
    Seems like you skipped chapters. like there was no actual break up, and her and the dude never actually got together.... and Taylor and harry... well you didn't explain that at all.
    Falling For You |H.S|
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    What happens when a twenty three year old manager of the biggest company in London falls in love with an eighteen year old dancer? Would things change between them? After all, she is his daughter's nanny....
    mrsHemmings01
    1 years ago
    If you don't like it, you don't have to read it. You're not being forced to read it :)
    desauteles
    1 years ago
    I never said I didn't like it. I'm just trying to provide some constructive criticism, as I write a little myself. When writing, it's okay to skip time, but there should be a clear note of that so the reader/s doesn't become confused.
    mrsHemmings01
    1 years ago
    I know, and I honestly forgot to put how much time skipped. And what happened between the time skip. I have become sloppy with this book, due to other books getting finished, and started other books. And I am not afraid to say that I have become sloppy with it. I appreciate your criticism, because it makes me a better writer, and helps me write better, and clearer.
  • desauteles
    1 years agoReply
    Seems like you skipped a chapter...
    Untamed
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    Jorgie never expected that moving too England would bring her too Harry. It is almost love at first sight, but someone is bound to destroy this couples bliss.. Take note that this is completely fiction....
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