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    Really well written. The meteor thing was a bit un-detailed and un-related to the speech. I liked the INTENSE amount of detail in the book. The first cliff hanger is a really good one and I suggest for future chapter to always end in a cliff hanger (if possible) because it would match the wild universe and always leave suspicion for the reader. They can think anything is possible which makes them want to carry on. Like'd and fav'd. :D Awsome book. Deserves more recognition. :) Keep on writing!!
    Plan Of Action
    Plan Of Action
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    Two astronauts crash land on a mysterious planet and find themselves in the middle of a civil war.
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    1 Like
    Nope. I was exited. :)
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    It's written really well overall, just a few mistakes:
    Check over your spelling "I" is written in lower case some times.
    Start a new sentece when someone speaks.
    Read over your work!!!!
    Liked! Write on!
    Special
    Special
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    Jess is special. But she cant let anyone know. She hates living a boring life when she has such a Amazing secret. When will she be able to reveal the secret? And why ?
    Truthbetold
    5 years ago
    Thank you :)
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    And I thought Bash said that he didn't like books that aren't fantasy! <<<Bit of a fail there Bash!
    Moving from the fact the Bash now accepts some other genres, this book is really good. The feelings of the person are written really well. Although the other half of chapter 2 should be chapter 3, as it's a bit too long and the reader get's bored. A few mistakes with grammar and punctuation in the 2nd chapter. Check through :D Other than that, it's really good. Like'd and faved.
    Alone
    Alone
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    I am not afraid of the dark, or wild animals, or things that go bump in the night. The only thing that I am afraid of is happening, I am slowly becoming more and more................... alone. And I am...
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    Well, if you knew it was going to be fantasy, you should have put in the keyword or chnaged the genre.......it's that simple!
    Bash
    5 years ago
    Uuuhhh ok??????
    Dibbs
    4 years ago
    its a bit of both, fantasy mystery?
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