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I write what I want, and accept opinions.

  • CharlotteG133
    I think you have a good story here, but it could use development. Like, your pronouns are confusing you say "you" and "I" and its all about the same person. Also, your dialogue seems more like a texting conversation, so maybe try to develop that. But, like you said, you're just having fun with this, so don't worry too much. It was just for future reference with a more serious Movella story.
    Summer........Justin??
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    Have you ever wondered what summer would be like with Justin Bieber and even more amazing things just read to find out
    ImmaTellU1Time
    4 years ago
    Im making a new story so i will for sure use your advice(:
    CharlotteG133
    4 years ago
    Alright, cool! I think your Justin Movella is a good idea, so you should try and work on that one too!!
  • CharlotteG133
    i HATE ITT!! JUST KIDDING! ;] haha i love it!! <33 Good luck on exams this week!
    New Beginning *Niall Love Story*
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    The first relationship that Elizabeth has ever been through has been crushed by one mistake, with a now crazed ex boyfriend left alone. Elizabeth is now single for the first time in 2 years, and needs...
  • CharlotteG133
    Bean, keep the boys out of it, you have small bump with them in it. I like this how it is. simple, yet effective. And i like it being just peyton. Maybe some parts have niall POV thoo...idk
    The Blonde Boy
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    Niall Horan has just moved to Seattle and is utterly lost in this new world. His mum and dad fight constantly, his sister has an abusive boyfriend, and he can't escape the madness going on in his new home....
    thesarahstyles
    4 years ago
    Im updting tomorrow
    CharlotteG133
    4 years ago
    Updating what tom.?
    thesarahstyles
    4 years ago
    this story. i just updated it now lol
  • CharlotteG133
    Hey Guys, I just wanted to say that I can't always update my story! I have dance and cheer practice everynight and then theres games Tues and Fri! But i try to write as much as i can, but thanks for reading " The Bucket List" have a good day! Hugs, xoxo Char
    The Bucket List
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    Change was not Carter Jameson's favorie verb. He was a loner because he had no friends. He felt like he didn't have family either. Blair Winchester was diagnosed with cancer, and now it's a race against...
  • CharlotteG133
    So much truth to your chapter!
    The World Would Be Perfect If...
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    My idea of a perfect world :) The second line "all could hear and see" basically means that there is no disability, illness, disease, poverty, etc... and the third line, "And we dropped our swords and...
    Nina :)
    5 years ago
    Thankyou :)
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