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  • Char472
    4 years agoReply
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    Hey, 1Directioner Avery Jackson. :D You rock!!!!!
    I just read 'High C's Induce sleep'. I think you write great, the story line is interesting, it keeps my attention. But I do have some things I think could be improved. From the point of just a reader, I find it very very hard to relate to Avery. She is to good. Though she eats what ever she wants, and wouldn't be considered skinny, she can beat a teenage boy at running, out run all the other soccer athletes, rock in spandex and skinny jeans, get 2 guys to hit on her 1st day at school even though it is a big school and there are probably tons of cute girls, cream the choir at singing, and have a guy try to take pictuers of her first day of school. I am absolutely no expert and I do think the book is great. But I find it really hard to relate to this girl. Its like you have created a story of a girl that you want to be. A girl who is perfect in everything she does. I think if she messed up in something I could relax more while reading than think, "Holy Cheezits. she is just perfect. I mess up so much more than her"
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    Hey, I'm Avery. I thought I had it figured out, ya know? I thought I had distinguished the difference between love and imagination. I was SO sure that no one could ever love me. Especially someone so extraordinary...
    AveryJackson
    4 years ago
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    wow. Thanks for taking the time towrite all that! I really appreciate it! And yeah, I have to say that I COMPLETELY agree with you in reference to Avery's character. In a lot of ways, yeah, she's kinda like a parellel me-a much better version anyways. I can't tell you how much I wish I WAS Avery. I think I did go a little overboard with the 'perfectness'. I hope that it didn't wreck the rest of the story for you! Thanks again for the coment. :)
    Char472
    4 years ago
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    Yeah. No problem. :D I do think the book is amazing!!! You didn't wreck the story! I still think it is great. :D Way to take others opinions well!!!! That deserves as much praise as this great story! =) Keep writing!
    AveryJackson
    4 years ago
    I will haha thanks! I'm actually plotting a new book now can't wait to write it!! :)
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