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  • Cathypee
    5 years agoReply
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    When talking about the horns, you say 'it' echoes, but you don't specific what 'it' is. Maybe you should say 'letting the sound echo' or something more detailed if you wish.
    The Shalkyries
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    'The city that never sleeps, soon to be the city that never wakes.' The Shalkyries have been living right under the nose of humans for decades, plotting their fatal attack. What happens when they finally...
    WriterMan
    5 years ago
    thank you for your advice. It was very helpful. Was there anything you liked?
    Cathypee
    5 years ago
    yes, the whole story :P
    WriterMan
    5 years ago
    :P haha very funny
  • Cathypee
    5 years agoReply
    You're very good at rhyming :P
    Dragons: Good or Bad?
    Dragons: Good or...
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    When I first set myself the challenge to write a poem based on Dragons, the first thing that came to my mind, was this stereotypical idea of the fire breathing, flying, type that eats everything. So I...
    WriterMan
    5 years ago
    No I'm not!!!!
    Cathypee
    5 years ago
    Everyone disagrees with you. Shush.
    WriterMan
    5 years ago
    No, Everyone agrees with me!
  • Cathypee
    5 years agoReply
    In the paragraph starting with 'David was based at the King David Hotel', you use 'the fact that' twice, I was wondering if you knew a synonymous phrase to avoid repetition!
    King David Hotel
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    A take on the King David Hotel Bombings in Tel Aviv in 1946. An imagined story of the different perspectives of all the nationalities involved, looking at their motivations and drives in fictional form....
    Cathypee
    5 years ago
    What haven't I read?
    mashewbarker
    5 years ago
    Ah don't worry. My computer isn't working probably. It says you've not read the chapters.
    mashewbarker
    5 years ago
    I'm looking around the website, and half the stories seem to be fantasies about Harry Styles.
  • Cathypee
    5 years agoReply
    I like the little religious cameo haha. The rest is exquisite though! Your thoughts are so complex :)
    A Word
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    My first poem. Hints and tips would be great. I've kept it short, any interpretations ideas would be great. I had a few in mind whilst writing it, but it would be great to hear what you all think Thanks...
    Cathypee
    5 years ago
    It is a good thing if you want to go to Oxford ;) need a complex mind for that! And oooo deep!
    mashewbarker
    5 years ago
    I do English where we analyse this sort of stuff, so it was interesting to have a go myself
    mashewbarker
    5 years ago
    The rest is exquisite? That so the biblical reference isn't haha
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