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  • bobsicle
    5 minutes agoReply
    This is great: it has strong sentiment and a clear tone. I love the repeated themes (chocolate, cigars, 'good luck') because they give a whole togetherness to the piece, as well as making it seem historically accurate with the sense of routine. The fact that you don't describe Daniels made me imagine him like someone I know, which made the whole thing more powerful. :) I thought this was amazing.
    Good Luck
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    Inspired by first-hand accounts of World War 1
  • bobsicle
    1 weeks agoReply
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    Paper Towns is amazing! I read it recently and it totally changed the way I viewed the world... Then I read the author's notes thing at the book and realised it was just John Green trying to sound big. ;) That aside, it is an beautifully written book and would be a great gift.
    'The Strange and Beautiful Sorrows of Ava Lavender' by Leslye Walton is also a great read (mainly for teenage girls) because it has some very moving portrayals of different types of relationships and the language is wonderfully crafted. The whole thing flows and there is not much action but the descriptions are delightful.
    Love2write
    1 weeks ago
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    I agree, Paper Towns is beyond amazing and I can't wait for the movie! :)
  • bobsicle
    1 weeks agoReply
    All your poetry is exquisitely emotive. I can't believe the language in this, and the way you've woven in the repeated theme from the title really connects the poem and makes it feel whole. This flows brilliantly. :)
    Skies At Midnight
    Skies At Midnight
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    Another romance poem full of love and romance. What it brings to us, How we feel. What we expect. What we do. So much love in us. We want to share.
  • bobsicle
    1 weeks agoReply
    This is amazing. I particularly love the second verse; it is charming and poetic. The whole poem is delicate and clever, and the mood and atmosphere are enchanting. :) One thing: you have put 'Your my fairy' when it should be 'You're my fairy'. Other than that, this is perfect.
    Whispers In The Dark
    Whispers In The...
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    Whispers in the dark is about love and romance. Candlelight dinners and walks in the park. Love all around. Feeling so much for someone. Always wanting that kiss and warm embrace.
  • bobsicle
    1 weeks agoReply
    Sweet and touching. I love the emotion in this poem, and I think the language you have used is beautiful. :) I haven't seen anything from you for a while, but this is wonderful and it's good to have you back.
    Mother
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    About a mother's love and what she does for you. How she tries to protect you at all costs. She will do anything for you. To make you happy and safe. Always there for you.
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